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don't touch me

eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
edited November 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
don't touch me
I'll snap

I'm stretched so tight
I'll break soon

don't look at me
I'll lose my defences

I've planned this so well
I'll break down if you care

don't touch me
I'll dry my tears again

I'm gonna build the wall high up
I'll be safe again

life is too hard
I'll never come out again

please give me a hug
(and) I'll be safe again
"Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
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  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    hmmh.
    I'm having mixed thoughts about this one. :o
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    It sounds like mixed emotions, this poem. Like, in your head you tell yourself to just be stiff and rigid and build that wall around you so you don't get hurt again. But, in your heart, you don't want to isolate yourself, you really just want to be loved, hugged, safe in the arms of ______. :) Tear down that wall and brace yourself for whatever lays outside it's false security! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    It sounds like mixed emotions, this poem. Like, in your head you tell yourself to just be stiff and rigid and build that wall around you so you don't get hurt again. But, in your heart, you don't want to isolate yourself, you really just want to be loved, hugged, safe in the arms of ______. :) Tear down that wall and brace yourself for whatever lays outside it's false security! :)

    :o
    thank you! :)
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    I really liked this one and the style in which you wrote it. Thanks for sharing ;)
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  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    coachchris wrote:
    I really liked this one and the style in which you wrote it. Thanks for sharing ;)

    thank you coachie! :D;)
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    The following is a song I really like. Your poem made me think of it........

    Walls (by Pacifier [the band])

    on your own today
    lost with no direction
    they took your dreams away
    and stripped you of protection
    but there's a light that won't burn out
    when your heart is screaming out
    is screaming

    it doesn't matter where you are
    there is life behind the walls around you
    it doesn't matter where you start
    won't be long, won't be long until
    the walls around you are gone

    on my own again
    with open invitations and the world i'm in
    is such a new sensation
    but there's a light that won't burn out
    if your heart begins to doubt

    it doesn't matter where you are
    there is life behind that walls around you
    it doesn't matter where you start
    it won't be long, won't be long until
    the walls around you are gone

    maybe a path to glory
    it maybe a road to dust
    it maybe there's one great story in all of us
    in all of us, yeah

    on your own today
    lost with no direction
    they took your dreams away
    and stripped you of protection
    but there's a light that won't burn out
    when your heart is screaming out
    is screaming

    it doesn't matter where you are
    there is life behind the walls around you
    it doesn't matter where you start
    it won't be long, won't be long until
    the walls around you are gone

    (cos when the walls are closing in)
    (another day begins)
    (as the last flame flickers out)
    cos there's something good in us
    (cos when the walls are closing in)
    (another day begins)
    (as the last flame flickers out)
    cos there's something good in us
    (cos when the walls are closing in)
    (another day begins)
    there must be something beautiful in us
    cos there's something good in us
    (cos when the walls are closing in)
    (another day begins)
    there must be something beautiful in us
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    I like that song too. :)
    especially this line:
    there must be something beautiful in us

    but it's really good all the way. :)
    and I bet the band is amazing! :D
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    I like this one as well eMMI. Good read. I have felt that way before.
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    twin1 wrote:
    I like this one as well eMMI. Good read. I have felt that way before.

    thank you! :)
    that's some confusing and difficult feeling. :o
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
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