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Lying Beside You

twin2twin2 Posts: 894
edited September 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
There's a comfort in your embrace.
A strength that is in place.
When you hold me in your arms, nothing else exists.
God knows I live for times like this.

Lying beside you, I can hear your heart beat.
I lay so close now, with your chest against my cheek.
I close my eyes and feel the warmth of your touch.
I didn't think I'd ever need someone so much.

It's just a unity, a feeling of safe.
I know I could handle anything that life wants me to take.
As long as I have you by my side.
The odds can always be defied.

Lying beside you, I don't need to fear,
you make all of the sadness disappear.
The love that surrounds us lifts me up,
and I know it will always be enough.
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  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    Very romantic :)
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  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Nothingbetter wrote:
    Very romantic :)


    I'm truly a romantic at heart anyway!
  • jammergurljammergurl Posts: 33
    twin2 wrote:
    There's a comfort in your embrace.
    A strength that is in place.
    When you hold me in your arms, nothing else exists.
    God knows I live for times like this.

    Lying beside you, I can hear your heart beat.
    I lay so close now, with your chest against my cheek.
    I close my eyes and feel the warmth of your touch.
    I didn't think I'd ever need someone so much.

    It's just a unity, a feeling of safe.
    I know I could handle anything that life wants me to take.
    As long as I have you by my side.
    The odds can always be defied.

    Lying beside you, I don't need to fear,
    you make all of the sadness disappear.
    The love that surrounds us lifts me up,
    and I know it will always be enough.

    Just wanted to say this is great! I like it alot...can totally feel what you are saying...it seems almost like something that I would write.

    Your second paragraph last two sentences:

    I close my eyes and feel the warmth of your touch.
    I didn't think I'd ever need someone so much.

    kinda similar to mine from the poetry vault in the one called Eternal:

    my flesh yearns for your clever touch
    heaven only knows I'd miss you this much

    Great work....hope to see more from you!!!
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    I am myself........like you some how.........(Release)
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  • markymark550markymark550 Columbia, SC Posts: 5,157
    Me likes! I wish I could write something as sweet and romantic as this, instead of my usual darker and gloomier stuff. I can really identify with
    "I close my eyes and feel the warmth of your touch.
    I didn't think I'd ever need someone so much."
    a lot because I never, ever thought I would love or need my girlfriend as much as I do. Great work, hope to read more soon.
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    There's a comfort in your embrace.
    A strength that is in place.
    When you hold me in your arms, nothing else exists.
    God knows I live for times like this.

    Lying beside you, I can hear your heart beat.
    I lay so close now, with your chest against my cheek.
    I close my eyes and feel the warmth of your touch.
    I didn't think I'd ever need someone so much.

    It's just a unity, a feeling of safe.
    I know I could handle anything that life wants me to take.
    As long as I have you by my side.
    The odds can always be defied.

    Lying beside you, I don't need to fear,
    you make all of the sadness disappear.
    The love that surrounds us lifts me up,
    and I know it will always be enough.

    its simplicity belies the care and expression in the structure......it reads very well, and its structure is flawless and neat :) I really like it......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    It's perfect, really, just stupendous! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    twin2 wrote:
    I'm truly a romantic at heart anyway!

    It really shows ;)
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    This was a truly touching poem. I loved it (as I always do all of them). You are too talented little sis'! Now get out of the message pit! :o)))) SMILE!!!
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
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