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can you hear what I see?

anonymousanonymous Posts: 21
edited July 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
time has turned this heart to stone
chains of regret change this home
to a prison of sadness guarded by guilt
that has slowly torn down a life that was built
upon trust and honesty between us two
one of us knowing the other without a clue
too cowardly to admit all the lies
too afraid of the inevitable despise
tired of acting the lead in this play
a one act show in a lifetime charade
how unfortunate it has taken so long
to find out that we truly belong
somewhere else,anywhere else,everywhere else
except right here where we question ourselves
about why and what happened to the love we once shared
when we knew all along that neither of us cared
so here I sit writing of sadness and sorrow
wishing tonight would turn to tomorrow
hoping things will seem clearer by day
but knowing in my heart I will feel the same way
I remain,
anonymous
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  • Medicated-GeniusMedicated-Genius Posts: 359
    anonymous wrote:
    time has turned this heart to stone
    chains of regret change this home
    to a prison of sadness guarded by guilt
    that has slowly torn down a life that was built
    upon trust and honesty between us two
    one of us knowing the other without a clue
    too cowardly to admit all the lies
    too afraid of the inevitable despise
    tired of acting the lead in this play
    a one act show in a lifetime charade
    how unfortunate it has taken so long
    to find out that we truly belong
    somewhere else,anywhere else,everywhere else
    except right here where we question ourselves
    about why and what happened to the love we once shared
    when we knew all along that neither of us cared
    so here I sit writing of sadness and sorrow
    wishing tonight would turn to tomorrow
    hoping things will seem clearer by day
    but knowing in my heart I will feel the same way

    I remember being there.........I am glad I am not any longer. Peace to you.
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    maybe its because i just woke up
    that one made me cry
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    I hope you feel better, i really do. I live with sadness at times and it really does suck. Peace to you.
  • hsewifhsewif Posts: 444
    "too afraid of the inevitable despise"....................

    I'm not a poet so I have no business typing this but....I think 'demise' would work at the end, too. :) At first read, that's what my eyes saw and it 'fit' for me.
  • edeneden Posts: 407
    hsewif wrote:
    "too afraid of the inevitable despise"....................

    I'm not a poet so I have no business typing this but....I think 'demise' would work at the end, too. :) At first read, that's what my eyes saw and it 'fit' for me.

    He enjoys playing on words and common phrases..
    I could be wrong but I think he did that purposely :)
  • anonymousanonymous Posts: 21
    hsewif wrote:
    "too afraid of the inevitable despise"....................

    I'm not a poet so I have no business typing this but....I think 'demise' would work at the end, too. :) At first read, that's what my eyes saw and it 'fit' for me.

    no problem. I'm not a poet either. I'm just happy you took the time to read it.
    thank you.
    eden wrote:
    He enjoys playing on words and common phrases..
    I could be wrong but I think he did that purposely:)

    I'm not a very deep person but I do try and make a person think.
    I remain,
    anonymous
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Posts: 570
    This is definitely a beaut, anonymous. You have awesome flow and verbiage in all the right places. It's extremely well done.
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    "how unfortunate it has taken so long
    to find out that we truly belong
    somewhere else,anywhere else,everywhere else
    except right here where we question ourselves"

    Man, this part is just so right on! Questioning, trying to make right what you know is wrong, hoping today will turn into tomorrow with the false hope that it may make a difference but knowing it won't...yes, this is very good! :) Thanks for sharing your poem!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • velvet I sitevelvet I site Posts: 192
    Nothingbetter wrote:
    This is definitely a beaut, anonymous. You have awesome flow and verbiage in all the right places. It's extremely well done.


    mmm very nice flow and verbiage indeed. i have to agree i think this is my favorite in all of the posts here. thanks.
    change begins with discontent.
  • edeneden Posts: 407
    anonymous wrote:



    I'm not a very deep person but I do try and make a person think.

    Oh youre deep my friend,
    make no mistake about that darlin' ;):)
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