Jesus and Salt

movingfinger

Jesus and Salt

Jesus and hot biscuits,
With gravy,
When it’s raining outside;
Like it did,
And will again.

Jesus and coffee,
With steam,
That runs against
Dirt pressed in your face.

Jesus and salt.
Last time you
Sprinkled them in
A bottle cap
And coated
Your veins
On one last
Transmutation.

Ms. Haiku

I like this poem. The strength is in your ability to draw a big picture with few words. The first two stanzas are like a confrontation.

movingfinger

thank you very much. i was worried that the poem's imagery was too vague.

john girl

biscuits and gravy

Ali

movingfinger wrote:

Jesus and Salt

Jesus and hot biscuits,
With gravy,
When it’s raining outside;
Like it did,
And will again.

Jesus and coffee,
With steam,
That runs against
Dirt pressed in your face.

Jesus and salt.
Last time you
Sprinkled them in
A bottle cap
And coated
Your veins
On one last
Transmutation.

I was feeling Biblical...then I looked at this.Now I dont have to write tonight....or do I.
Nice work.Amazing:)

movingfinger

thank you all for commenting, i would love to hear some reader's interpretations of it.