Jesus and Salt

movingfinger
movingfinger Posts: 117
edited June 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Jesus and Salt

Jesus and hot biscuits,
With gravy,
When it’s raining outside;
Like it did,
And will again.

Jesus and coffee,
With steam,
That runs against
Dirt pressed in your face.

Jesus and salt.
Last time you
Sprinkled them in
A bottle cap
And coated
Your veins
On one last
Transmutation.
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The Moving Finger writes; and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all your Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
Nor all your Tears wash out a Word of it

-- Omar Khayyam
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  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,389
    I like this poem. The strength is in your ability to draw a big picture with few words. The first two stanzas are like a confrontation.
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  • movingfinger
    movingfinger Posts: 117
    thank you very much. i was worried that the poem's imagery was too vague.
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    The Moving Finger writes; and, having writ,
    Moves on: nor all your Piety nor Wit
    Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
    Nor all your Tears wash out a Word of it

    -- Omar Khayyam
  • john girl
    john girl Posts: 308
    biscuits and gravy
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    movingfinger wrote:
    Jesus and Salt

    Jesus and hot biscuits,
    With gravy,
    When it’s raining outside;
    Like it did,
    And will again.

    Jesus and coffee,
    With steam,
    That runs against
    Dirt pressed in your face.

    Jesus and salt.
    Last time you
    Sprinkled them in
    A bottle cap
    And coated
    Your veins
    On one last
    Transmutation.
    I was feeling Biblical...then I looked at this.Now I dont have to write tonight....or do I.
    Nice work.Amazing:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

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  • movingfinger
    movingfinger Posts: 117
    thank you all for commenting, i would love to hear some reader's interpretations of it.
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    The Moving Finger writes; and, having writ,
    Moves on: nor all your Piety nor Wit
    Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
    Nor all your Tears wash out a Word of it

    -- Omar Khayyam

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