Face in the Crowd

movingfinger

Falling,
trying to climb out of your eyes.
Dappled planets circling in the radiance of the sun.
Orbiting,
My stomach sinks to the ground
Lost in an eternal moment,
I see myself in your eyes.
Pink waves break against ivory shores
lips curl back

I have already begun
Processing the millions of possibilities
That my first word to you could bring
Could i say this word, though,
or the words that i wish to say?
No, I will go on
As another face in the crowd
A stranger to your memory

EvilToasterElf

This is such an interesting topic to explore, all the emotions that can fill your head for nothing more than an eyeblink, and how different they can be, this is a good start, I don't want to be critical, but I seriously would like to see this a lot longer, as if you were describing something like a concert, how different are these reactions as you're walking into a show compared to when you're walking out, or you walk to work as opposed to your walk home. I think you can really draw this out and do something wonderful with it. Nice work.

ISN

although I've never felt this way......(I think it's more of a guy thing), I can certainly under4stand it......and to all my admirers, I just say 'wait!!!!'......hehheheeh

Ali

movingfinger wrote:

Falling,
trying to climb out of your eyes.
Dappled planets circling in the radiance of the sun.
Orbiting,
My stomach sinks to the ground
Lost in an eternal moment,
I see myself in your eyes.
Pink waves break against ivory shores
lips curl back

I have already begun
Processing the millions of possibilities
That my first word to you could bring
Could i say this word, though,
or the words that i wish to say?
No, I will go on
As another face in the crowd
A stranger to your memory

How romantic!
Could you just please utter the words I lOVE YOU to your dear-heart!
You know thats what you want to say!

GREAT POEM!

A:)

VEDHEAD27

Wow! Great poem indeed movingfinger. I like this one a lot.

grooveamatic

I didn't get it until the last few lines....then it all came together...very nice....

movingfinger

i think i feel this way at least once a day, held within the shadow of possibility.