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velvet I sitevelvet I site Posts: 192
edited July 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
sometimes i put out the worst ones, and sometimes i put out the new ones, but i always put out the real ones..


"The Twilight Song--verse 1"


unbridled hymns of Love
sing
over green rich hills of pine
blue sky revamps with joyous wonder
floating on clouds
birds and angels watch from above
the beyond where abysses grow
gaping wide
echoes come alive
change begins with discontent.
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  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Posts: 570
    the beyond where abysses grow
    gaping wide
    echoes come alive



    That says it all.
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I like that the echoes come alive...
    very earthy feel... with heavenly power....;)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • cartoonnightmarecartoonnightmare Posts: 52
    wow..beautiful...thanks for sharing
  • velvet I sitevelvet I site Posts: 192
    your words are FAR too kind.. but thanks for trying to make me feel better..
    ;)

    seriously.. i'm still trying.. maybe soon i'll get myself together..




    Sometimes I burn like a dot on the sun with no one knowing..
    But you're keeping me strong.. Moving along with you..



    if you only knew how much it all means to me
    change begins with discontent.
  • cartoonnightmarecartoonnightmare Posts: 52
    no seriously --

    the poem is short. and it visualizes a very .."controversial" subject, with plain words...(at least that is what i saw in it)
  • Tremor AndronicusTremor Andronicus Posts: 34
    i think i just threw up a little in my mouth!










    nah, i'm jus messin' wit'cha, twas fine.
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    '03: 4/30; 6/28; 7/2,3,5,6,8,9,14;
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    '05: 3/18; 5/25 Ed w/ rck schl kds; 9/1,2;
    '06: 7/16,18,22,23.
    '08: 4/7
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