An attempt to rhyme

MOON LOVEMOON LOVE Posts: 35
Here it goes:

I wrote a song about you
You didn't believe it was true
I put my thoughts to music
Explaining love between two
Maybe I am too mental
And you too fucking serene
But now you rent space in my mind
And my thoughts, they are all obscene
My dream is to one day touch you
and I hope you would reciprocate
But what I can see from waiting this long
Is that my timing may be a bit too late

Let me know what you think....
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Comments

  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    i think you came through and your muses worked with you on this one. i LOVED the part "You rent a space in my mind".LOVE THAT!
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    especially the "too fucking serene" line
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