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asphaltasphalt Posts: 113
edited June 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
It wasn’t the skin
It wasn’t the flesh
Not even my chest
Brushing her breasts
It wasn’t my shirt
It wasn’t her blouse
Not even a sound
I swear it was silent
As could have been aloud
The hands were exchanged
The souls got quaint
Distances got chocked
Struggling on scale
Two patient tourists
Too careful to fall in love
Sealed the envelopes
Too unsure with words
Messenger boy knew the world
High land trekker was the girl
Losing champions didn’t want to drown
Got submerged in a hug


been a while since i had last posted .... was out on a trip ... nice to be back
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  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    I like how the poem slowly introduces the reader to the protagonists as the protagonists were slowly introduced to each other. It unfolds nicely.
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  • Anna_falkAnna_falk Posts: 114
    Great that you are back :), very nice poem !
    To worry about tomorrow doesn't make it easier,
    it only makes today worse.
  • asphaltasphalt Posts: 113
    hey anna ....yeah it feels good to be back .... i just wrote down the lines in about a couple of minutes ... and although the poem is not very impressively poetic .. it just explains as to how sometimes a hug may mean so much more than a kiss . n e ways thanks
    see ya
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    i want to hug someone :)

    good poem!
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
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