disturbed sleep

asphalt
asphalt Posts: 113
edited May 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
usualy wouldn't have written it ... not the best of the stuff ... but was quite disturbed since morning .. so just penned something .... here's it


Never been ached like this
To the bones
On my own bed
Alone
Surprised at the scene
Of my dreams
You were fucking him
And were pleased

The sweet intentions
Of a gymnast coiled
In a bent emotion
Never made me more weak
For the supple lips
Kissed another meat
Never the blood complained
For the morning so unruly received

That cruel picture
That clearly revealed
Hours of assumptions
And patience
At a flip side demeaned
A jealous confrontation
With friends
I couldn’t heal

She summed up all the bonds
Jumbled up beliefs
A looser found engaged
With himself
A single moment of tolerance
Left scarred interests
A burning helplessness
Encountered in sleep

You were fucking him
And were pleased
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  • Anna_falk
    Anna_falk Posts: 114
    Did you dream this last night ? Sounds like a nightmare, interesting poem ;)
    To worry about tomorrow doesn't make it easier,
    it only makes today worse.
  • asphalt
    asphalt Posts: 113
    yeah it was a disturbing dream ... yeah last night ... all my apprehensions seemed justified .... was tough ...thnaks for the reply n e ways ...
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    "the sweet intentions of a gymast coiled in a bent emotion"


    man... that line is really really good

    I've read that dreams about a lover cheating signifies self esteem issues. Certainly brought on by perhaps unspoken signals from the cheater... best bet to have it out and see whassup, honest and all that. My 2 cents. Please forgive my audacity.... shutting up, now :D
  • asphalt
    asphalt Posts: 113
    thanks for comments P.N. .... all the shit around, the uneasiness, the anger ..... contained ... just generates excuses for poems ... and its always a 'better feeling' to share it here .
    need to get over things ..
    fck
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    everything will be alright :)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    oh, I KNOW, asphalt

    I totally know

    catharsis via poetry. venting to page and to a group of people that show promise in caring... at least enough to help you through the day. I personally did it for a long time, and still do here and there.

    There are some interesting visions in your work, and some excellent "potential", if I may say so.

    good luck to you
  • asphalt
    asphalt Posts: 113
    working ahead now .... ... letting things off this head ..... thanks ALL for comments ... thanks pasta ...... ya know guys ... ... i'm trying to fight things out with anger ... let's see maybe in another thread ... something better ..

    thankaa everybody
  • meme
    meme Posts: 4,695
    Beautiful, Sad, True.

    Thanks for sharing
    ... and the will to show I will always be better than before.

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