a distant sun

asphalt

A distant sun’s anthropology
Revolving around with permission
Offers to descend an explanation
Explorations return to explain

My reason for confusion
A collective organic chaos
I’m sure I’ve really misplaced
The itinerary to my race

Breathe with a restrained heart
Puke with a dignified face
Ashamed of a naked nipple
For orgasms in my faith

All planetary paths resolved
She puckers the scientific map
And they circled around in a way
An orphan lost in a plague

Futures recommend a social touch
A hand so diminutive for fate
That punish no lucrative fault
That feel no mortal gale

I saw her riding the moon last night
The doves advertised a dame
A white spot forgiven the taste
The venuses landing with vain/fame

No beds were scorned for peace
No births are littered in space
A mars is born with a crimson heart
Why interrupt a defiant child’s foreplay

I’ve been shown numerous suits
Several opportunities to avail
A journey out there to exemplify
The modern living for apes

A dialogue couldn’t be so simple
A love made visible in brail
A Pluto winter for stammering flowers
A distance for plutonics to maintain

But you need to read a new page
The actors that we portray
Have found a tenth planet last week
We can give it a new name.

Being Enlightened

This was really cool, asphalt! I find myself reading it over and over. At first I didn't quite understand it and I like that because it made me want to keep at it, to try and get with it, connect with it. Once I reread it, I started getting some neat mental images and I really liked a lot of the lines you used and I want to tell you which ones in particular. These are my favorites:

"I’m sure I’ve really misplaced
The itinerary to my race,

Breathe with a restrained heart
Puke with a dignified face
Ashamed of a naked nipple
For orgasms in my faith,

I saw her riding the moon last night,

A journey out there to exemplify
The modern living for apes (damn, that one's great!),

The actors that we portray
Have found a tenth planet last week
We can give it a new name."

When I like a poem, there always seems to be a line that really stands out for me but this poem had so many I couldn't even begin to decide which I liked best! Thanks for sharing it!

9 = P in the SS (word equation)--guess that one'll have to updated now, huh?

asphalt

thanks 'being E' ... a really long analysis .. and for all the comments ... i kinda always end up writing long poems ...... and almost always ... the meaning begins to make sense only after you've read it completely ......... i understand many would rather like to browse through more stuff in lesser time ..... ..... thanks for reading the complete thing ........
take care

ISN

Asphalt, it seems so formal and precise, and I think that really adds to it.....it's not stiff though.....I like the words you've chosen to group together, because they're very incongruous.....this is one poem I'll re-read a few times......it's beautiful like space......and a little bit cold too, like a sparkler that hasn't bin lit, but has the potential to be exciting....!!!!

lovin kind

your poem is right up there with the best ones ive ever read