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Feelings Never Really Die

Thorns2010Thorns2010 Posts: 2,201
edited April 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I'm sure this will go like it always does when I post my poems for public display. Saying I need to rhyme better and some such, bleh to that I say!



Feelings never really die
They just fade away
Fade away to a cold dark death
A death so near for me now
A death so real
Nowhere to run
No chance to escape
This is my destiny
To die….
To die alone
Here in the dark
All alone
With no one….no one to blame
No one but myself
A life without you
It’s funny how it is
Never thought I’d feel this way
This way about you
Without you
How I miss you so
Change it I would if I could
This happy ending I can not have
Haunts my all the while
Haunts me until my dying day
Until my last breath leaves my mouth
I miss you
I still love you….
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Comments

  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    the less you rhyme the better, this isn't the 18th century
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    I agree with ETE, rhyming is okay if it works but sometimes poems that rhyme just seem too forced. :) It's the feeling that counts and in regards to your poem, I agree, feelings never really die, some do just fade away.
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • clifford_1972clifford_1972 Posts: 113
    thanx for sharing!
    "When a man lies,He murders some part of the world
    These are the pale deaths which men miscall their lives,All this I cannot bear to witness any longer,
    Cannot the kingdom of salvation,Take me home!"
    Cliff Burton R.I.PFebruary 10, 1962 – September 27, 1986
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    EvilToasterElf wrote:
    the less you rhyme the better, this isn't the 18th century

    The greatest poetry of the twentieth century rhymed, at least partially.
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