My second lyrics thread

dark_crystalis

So I'll post some of my metal band's lyrics please give critisism it always helps.

title: Serenade of Sins

Over the clouds, the sun’s shining
Why can’t we see its rays?
Leaves are rustling in the wind
Serenade of sins
Black, grey, white then blue
No birds are flying in the sky
Black sky – Its pouring rain
Complete freedom to cleanse the soul
Serenade of sins
Stading here in the rain
Alone in my head
I guess this should be the end
Clouds are finally dissipating
Sun’s shining, then why the fuck can’t it reach us?
Why are we in the dark?
Why are we stuck here to rot?
The things we did – Things we said
Serenade of decadence

title: none (yet)

I want to breath through you
Want to be in love with you
Want to bleed with you
Want to bleed you through
Want to end our pains
Finally understand

Been long since my salvation
Lost it all on the edge of madness
All the lights are off
Painted in black
I lack self-control

Since the day I fell apart
Never felt like I had a heart
Eternal coil or unbearable muddle

Follow the waves
To the edge of this
Always be a mystery
Already drowning under the waves
Don’t hold your breath
Follow the current

Melancholy leads to butchery
Honestly in pugatory
What to say
Sorry

EvilToasterElf

Serenade of Sins is pretty damn good. The second probably sounds better than it reads, most songs do