Party Politics (The Club Hit the Ground)

Big TonesBig Tones Posts: 3
I saw you from about forty yards back
but it was only within the last ten yards
that you took notice of me.
When you saw me I saw your ears
twitch and your nose sniff the air.
You’ve seen me before.

When I approached you
you became tense, frozen for a moment,
before darting back towards your little hole.
But you didn’t go in, you waited as I came
closer, back turned, almost as if you
wanted what was coming your way.
As if you were going to deal with that.

I was nigh five yards from you
when you choked,
when you finally darted into your little hole.
Just like I had feared you would.

As I tossed the club from my right hand
I saw your weak eyes watching me
and I know you felt shame when
the club hit the ground.
Why didn’t you turn and face me?
Coward.
You fucking disappoint me.
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  • Big TonesBig Tones Posts: 3
    Big Tones wrote:
    I saw you from about forty yards back
    but it was only within the last ten yards
    that you took notice of me.
    When you saw me I saw your ears
    twitch and your nose sniff the air.
    You’ve seen me before.

    When I approached you
    you became tense, frozen for a moment,
    before darting back towards your little hole.
    But you didn’t go in, you waited as I came
    closer, back turned, almost as if you
    wanted what was coming your way.
    As if you were going to deal with that.

    I was nigh five yards from you
    when you choked,
    when you finally darted into your little hole.
    Just like I had feared you would.

    As I tossed the club from my right hand
    I saw your weak eyes watching me
    and I know you felt shame when
    the club hit the ground.
    Why didn’t you turn and face me?
    Coward.
    You fucking disappoint me.

    Nicely worded. Good pace.
  • Big Tones wrote:
    Nicely worded. Good pace.


    Nice bump. But nice poem. And I agree; a good pace.
    "And so the gizzard of the ruffed grouse now hangs aloft." - Clothed In Fur
  • El_KabongEl_Kabong Posts: 4,141
    I don't come around this forum too often but i'm glad is aw this. i really liked the imagery and just overall it was excellent!!
    standin above the crowd
    he had a voice that was strong and loud and
    i swallowed his facade cos i'm so
    eager to identify with
    someone above the crowd
    someone who seemed to feel the same
    someone prepared to lead the way
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