Misplaced Hate

Kovo

He walks down the dark hall he knows so well,
Feeling the cold glance from the once warm eyes.
Though he doesn't know what he's done.
A confrontation leads to words that pain his heart.
"I don't love you anymore" rips through him.
He could feel the love escape, but would not, could not realise it.
His world shatters around him.
The shards of pain from the words fall and stab him like broken glass.
But as a man of his pride, he picks himself up.
Nowhere to go, no one to love, he questions his fate.
He knows he should hate the one who has hurt him,
But unlike her, his love is true, and he can not hate what is good in this world.
To him, she is the good in this world.
So he embraces her in his mind, and hates himself,
Though he doesn't know why.

twin2

That's good, but sad. I really like it.

Nothingbetter

Such pain and agony....this poem really feels..

ISN

this is like a poem written by a five-year old.....its simplicity is bordering on moronic.......I commend you for your efforts, but you had better understand that poetry is more than writing - 'he did this to me, and I felt a bit sad....so I was very sad for a while'......it's not profound, it's dumb

Kovo

@ISN
I get the feeling you don't like the poem, but you never said how I could improve it or anything else I write. If you have any suggestions, I'd be glad to hear them.

pjalive21

That day the words rolled off your tongue, my world changed for the worse
I didn't see it coming but somehow in me i really did
You bailed when life was down, you didnt have it in you
I guess i wasnt trying hard enough, a failure in you eyes
How much can one man take, can he carry the world
Thats how you made it seem, invisible i was supposed to be

My life will go on eventho it almost didnt
I had the flatline in my hand, i decided to let it go
I didnt want you to let me be that paragraph

I pain as the days go on, i drink my thoughts to sleep
Repeating each day as if it was the same
I hope this goes away, since you already have
Stuck in my personal prison, serving a crimeless sentence
Regret is what you will feel one day, it might not be soon enough
When the dust settles and the pain goes away, i will rise above it all

depopulationINC

I like it, very insightful, but I think the end is not complete yet. it seems to be missing a conclusion, even though you do state that the love he feels for her is not returned. Interesting poem though...truly hate yet love somebody. something many before you have tried to express to no avail. Forsome reason it sorta makes my think of the beginning of "I'm Open"

Kovo

I'm Open? Who's it by?
And thanks for the input
Also, I like Later Days, the ending is uplifting.

depopulationINC

i'm open = pearl jam
I believe its off No Code