Just Me

KovoKovo Posts: 255
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I started to think about when I'm going to die, and that if I die old, I will be the only one who remembers the people I've known, the things we've done, the things that have happened. No one will even know I existed, I'll just be a stone, and so will the people that I love. It doesn't seem right, it seems like a waste of life, so I wrote this.

I'm the last one here, the last to leave.
The last alive, the last to breath.
All thats left of a faded dream,
The last one standing of an ancient team.
The only one left here from our past,
The one who's will gave out last.

All those years, faded away,
Because all have died, none left to say
The stories we've lived, the things we've seen,
Just a shadow, just me.

Old friends that have come and gone
All will be forgotten when I'm gone.
I'm the only one here to remember,
Then our past is gone forever.
It all seems so pointless now,
But it wasn't then, I don't know how.

But we were here, and that is ours,
Everything passes, even stars.
But the little that we held on too,
Can't be passed from me to you.
When you're old and beaten, and fade like light,
You'll see it too, you'll know I'm right.
I shouldn't have to fight a battle I'll never win, just to lose those I've never had.
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  • Awesome poem just friggin awesome. I hope I dont die all alone. I love to write poems that have yet to appply to my life but someday they might.

    Did I say aweome poem?
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  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    It reads well and is written well. Good job Kovo.
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    I like this poem. I've been thinking about death a bit. I don't mind the idea of the other side. At that point hopefully I won't care about this side, but I'm a little freaked out about the process to get there. It would be sad if I'm so attached to this side, that I just float around. That's my understanding of things . . .
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
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  • If you remember that life is temporary everytime you make a decision, I guarantee you'll be remembered
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    One time I was drinking a latte near the Magnolia area in Seattle. I sat on a bench that overlooked one of the most beautiful scenes - I could see the islands, and all that water, and the hills of Seattle, and the downtown skyline. It was truly one of the most memorable times those 10 years I lived there. I saw that the bench was placed there by the family and friends of someone named Deborah who had died. I forgot her last name. I thought that her family and friends must really have loved her to give me, a stranger, such an incredible gift out of her memory.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
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  • stuckinlinestuckinline Posts: 3,369
    very moving poem.
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    If you remember that life is temporary everytime you make a decision, I guarantee you'll be remembered


    I agree with this statement.
  • Part of me has always hoped I go before any more of my friends.

    Sounds a bit strange, but that is exactly it, what you have written. I do not want to be left only with memories. I want to be a part of it all. I want to experience, not recall occasions alone.
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Part of me has always hoped I go before any more of my friends.

    Sounds a bit strange, but that is exactly it, what you have written. I do not want to be left only with memories. I want to be a part of it all. I want to experience, not recall occasions alone.


    It's a good place to be. Time stands still for no one.
  • twin2 wrote:
    It's a good place to be. Time stands still for no one.

    ummm, okay....that threw me off a bit. Did you just call being dead a good place to be?
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    that's a really great poem! I really really like it!!
    normally poems "dealing" with death and so on freak me out and I can't read them and I gotta forget them instantly. but not this one..
    strange.

    very very good!! nice job! :)
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  • I read this yesterday and I didn't get the chance to respond. I think you've captured the lonliness that one feels when they're on their last legs and the last of their old gang to go. It's very sad but very good. :)
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  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    ummm, okay....that threw me off a bit. Did you just call being dead a good place to be?

    lol! Of course not. Maybe I misunderstood what you said. I took you saying you wanted to be "part of it all" as in living life. Now I reread that and see what you are talking about and that you mean that about death. And as far as dead being a good place to be, maybe when I am old and my body is done living and I feel like I've experienced everything I was supposed to and do everything I was supposed to, I may view it differently.
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Kovo, I agree with BE on this one. Nice job. Well written.
  • KovoKovo Posts: 255
    Thanks everyone, I just thought it would be a lonely way to go, a sad one too.
    I shouldn't have to fight a battle I'll never win, just to lose those I've never had.
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