beyond the life
franziska
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Beyond the life
I cant deny, I feel nothing obvious
I dont want to be mine
But what could I do - I cant exspel my fear
I feel my disappointment
I want to have the same
I wanna be there, where you are - Beyond the life
I dont forgive my son
I cant live this on
I got to feel the sun
I dont want to live this on
Now I feel the right one
#it a classical "I" and about me lyric. but.. no.. it isnt about me. what ever.. dont pay heed to the grammar please.. it's poesy ;=..a little bit
I cant deny, I feel nothing obvious
I dont want to be mine
But what could I do - I cant exspel my fear
I feel my disappointment
I want to have the same
I wanna be there, where you are - Beyond the life
I dont forgive my son
I cant live this on
I got to feel the sun
I dont want to live this on
Now I feel the right one
#it a classical "I" and about me lyric. but.. no.. it isnt about me. what ever.. dont pay heed to the grammar please.. it's poesy ;=..a little bit
Crumbling images no longer comfort me.
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I cant live this on
I got to feel the sun
I dont want to live this on
Now I feel the right one"
I thought your poem was cool :cool:! I like how you used "son" and "sun" and that you used "I got to feel the sun"--so bright in such darkness. I also liked how you played with the last two lines--to me, they could almost read as --
I don't want to live this one
Now I feel right on
--I just seemed to see that as I read it and I thought it was neat.