The nothing star - peter hellström

Nr7elevenNr7eleven Posts: 1
The nothing star shines tonight , over my head.
If I close my eyes , Belive in the night.
I can pretend that im dead.
No one to comfort me , no one to love.
Not even god , the father from above.
I never had a friend , or a destany.
I guess my only company , my own misery.
It follows me , never lets me down.
Its everywere i go, its in every sound

See my eyes , theyre field with sorrow.
Its the same thing, when i wake up tomorrow.
I go trough a narrow passage , a lonely street.
And the worst thing , are the people i meet.
They dont understand , they dont even see.
Kills me with there eyes , and the pain is so consistent.
I dont see an end to this , guess i have to make on for myself.
So if you find me wounded , or even dead.
Then look at the falling star , thats right over my head.

I dont want you to say that you tought it was bad or anything like that instead tell me what to change and i will think about it. Thanks hope you enjoyed it.
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Comments

  • StarziStarzi Posts: 10
    i really liked this.... i love the title the most "nothing star" i feel u here in alot of spots...to tell u the truth i could never tell people what to change in their poems, tis like asking pj to change a verse in one of their songs..let it pour out, and its beautiful, if you wrote it down as u felt it, and u still feel the same when u read it over.... beauty;)


    thanks for this man.. good job
    stargazer (n)-someone who is indifferent to the busy world.
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