Favorite line youve ever written

wats the favorite line you ever wrote?
But you break like a little girl.
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  • BinFrogBinFrog Posts: 7,309
    Probably "Everything does and I don't mind"
    Bright eyed kid: "Wow Typo Man, you're the best!"
    Typo Man: "Thanks kidz, but remembir, stay in skool!"
  • When I was fourteen I wrote "Beneath the reeds where the grassland bleeds, satchitananda is the summer creed." I'm still quite proud of that today.
  • dunkmandunkman Posts: 19,646
    when i was 15-16, I wrote a poem for a class that had to sum up despair/isolation/etc..

    my opening line was:-


    "The sun rose like bile...."


    I still really like it!
    oh scary... 40000 morbidly obese christians wearing fanny packs invading europe is probably the least scariest thing since I watched an edited version of The Care Bears movie in an extremely brightly lit cinema.
  • NastNast Posts: 127
    "I can't tell you how you make me feel, cause I'm not that good with words."
    The king of run on sentences...
  • "Your the bad habit, I wanted."
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    I'm unsure... I'd have to read up on my poems... :p

    here's some verses I like:

    She was born some time after than I was
    In those akward years of blushes and discarded dolls

    This is all that remains...
    This small frame of a person,
    The birds have removed the rest

    They flutter amongst the living
    With shallow breath and silent touch
    Pretty butterflies,
    War-childs painted blue and black.
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
  • i wrote a song trilogy about a year ago titled: ArSon, Quandary and At Peace At Last. it's about arson, mental disorders, religion, escape, confronting, death and euthanasia.

    in act two there is a line i wrote and it goes like this:

    "sunken memories anchored in her twirling mind"

    also in another song which is about my take on evolution

    "monkeys are laughing at us to this date
    since we're nothing more than a hybrid ape"

    they are both probably not even that good just the feeling i had writing those lines i remember made me feel good. i have a lot more though, but these are from the first 20 or so songs i wrote, so they mean a bit more to me.
    ~It is better to be hated for who you are than loved for who you are not - ?~

    ~You laugh because I am different, I laugh because you are all the fucking same -?~

    ~Education is the most powerfull weapon you can use to change the world - Nelson Mandela~
  • I also had to reread some of mine

    they usually have very short lines ;)

    here are some passages i like:

    "Autumn leaves were falling
    Saw him walking down the street
    No one
    Nowhere
    But in her eyes
    She closed them"

    "And where have you been
    While rain washed the
    Colors away"

    "When it’s my turn
    Where can I turn to
    There’s nothing but death
    Inside these walls of heads"
    How can I forget your tender smile
    Moments that I have shared with you
    Our hearts may break
    But they're on their way
    And there's nothing I can do
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Iam In Love With The World....
    ...my Heart Basking In Its Colors.
    ..........................adv...............................
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • pearlmuttpearlmutt Posts: 392
    Words Never Listen, I'm cheating too, my favorite is a stanza:

    because his eyes
    were more important than his mouth,
    yet not subordinate to his hands,
    an egalitarian relationship.

    and Nast that's very quotable, I like it:
    "I can't tell you how you make me feel, cause I'm not that good with words."
  • KovoKovo Posts: 255
    The blood was mine, the blood is gone,
    My blood has paid for all my wrongs.
    The blood is dark, the blood is red,
    The colour of love for which I've bled.

    I wrote that for a girl I know but never gave it too her, I was trying to cheer her up but I had the feeling that wouldn't work.
    I shouldn't have to fight a battle I'll never win, just to lose those I've never had.
  • pearlmutt wrote:
    because his eyes
    were more important than his mouth,
    yet not subordinate to his hands,
    an egalitarian relationship."


    Wow, very beautiful...

    It seems to be a kind of "truth" to me...
    hard to explain :)

    very nice
    How can I forget your tender smile
    Moments that I have shared with you
    Our hearts may break
    But they're on their way
    And there's nothing I can do
  • jboelhowjboelhow Posts: 170
    From the poem "The last night of a relationship"

    "For a good lie/is better than a bad truth"
    Live the life you dream

    "Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
    So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
  • JoeyJoey Posts: 60
    Misunderstood lyrics, misconstrued music,
    he dances upon a stage with a mask
    bringing unbelivable calrity and control to the sound of chaos.
    "The fat man walks alone"
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    I hope you don't mind-it's a short poem instead of a line, written late 95 or early 96.

    Diva’s - 7916 Greenwood Avenue North

    I dismiss all rules of etiquette
    and lean my head back while
    the last luscious drop of latte foam
    slithers down my throat.
    I feel like a dahlia in July
    waiting for rain
    anticipating sweet
    rejuvenation.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    My favorite of mine is three lines:

    I'm not what they say
    I'm what they've made me
    I'm the clay running through your hands, reshape me
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • trappedinmyradiotrappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
    nailz100 wrote:
    My favorite of mine is three lines:

    I'm not what they say
    I'm what they've made me
    I'm the clay running through your hands, reshape me

    and she ran down
    like the hands
    on a dollar clock
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • kdpjamkdpjam Posts: 2,303
    i would have to dredge some of my faves up but here are a few lines from something i wrote called imagination untrue:

    you can’t keep what you never had
    the truth is always deep in your heart
    as you’re breaking the shoreline, breaking apart
    here’s the ending, where do you start? ~
    lay down all thoughts; surrender to the void
    ~it is shining it is shining~
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    for aspiring writer's, or maybe just myself, the ultimate question...

    "should I be life's character, or life's author?"

    For an extended answer try reading Zorba the Greek, that book really hit me
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    last year, I wrote a song that had this, I don't really like it out of context, but oh well.

    "The stars--they shone a perfect light,
    but I couldn't look away from your eyes."

    I'm such a spaz,heh.

    I also really like this line, it was at the end of a poem I posted here a long ass time ago. I liked it for its cheesy romanticism, but unfortunately its the only good part of the poem, and its at the very end.

    "even though you'll never be mine
    being in the same world as you
    will do just fine"
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • asphaltasphalt Posts: 113
    hey i've just joined ... looks like a really nice place to be ..... n e ways can remember some of my lines .... once wrote...

    we slept with so many clothes on
    we woke up with so much at stake


    and that blood saga reminds me of another line ......

    no more teenage fashion for me
    the colour of blood is really red!

    and before i'm done i'll jus add one more .......

    i've been turning to coffins every night for more
    what's more
    what's more


    everything aside . it's great to be here .... been going through some stuff ... its all very good
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    "the pictures in my mind. Leaving room
    in that dark attic to wonder whether we are
    more human when ideas string together
    in strands of Christmas lights

    or when the blown fuse box of thought
    fills that crawlspace with memories and a blank smile."

    Not a complete line, just a complete thought

    ETE
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