Oh, taker

Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
edited November 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Hand me your pocketloads quiet thinker,
painter, naive heart-sinker,
full of empty promises and loaded glances;
you are not all I built you up to be,
pretty saint of sharp-tongued phrases
and sharper dresses,
to say nothing of your caresses.
why did you let me sing your praises?
all in all you were built up for ME to fall,
lonely, angry and childish, bereft of all.
"I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
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  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    my first proper foray into rhyming poetry, albeit with an unusual rhyme scheme. all comments are welcomed, nay, requested :)
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    "Dear little Flo - I love you so...
    Especially in your nightie.

    When the moonlight flits...
    across your tits...

    oh Jesus Christ... almighty."

    Derek and Clive, 1979


    :D
  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    "Dear little Flo - I love you so...
    Especially in your nightie.

    When the moonlight flits...
    across your tits...

    oh Jesus Christ... almighty."

    Derek and Clive, 1979


    :D
    you have such a crude sense of humour for an intelligent man :p
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
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