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24 weeks

Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
edited January 2008 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I have never heard the sound of the ocean
lapping at my feet in the first hours of night.
Never felt the foam of saltwater,
masking the corrosive will of nature at my skin,
stripping me of shell and shelter.
I have never dwelt in sand-buffered paradises,
wrinkling my tempered skin under the sun,
defying light in a fight I cannot hope to win.
I have never felt enough that these might
be things to miss, things to yearn for,
having never felt, I know nothing of them.
Years go by like seconds and I am not.
"I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
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  • JeanieJeanie Posts: 9,446
    Now I get it! :)

    Of course I already liked it but was having trouble with the relevance of the title. :confused::o

    Excellent stuff J. :)
    NOPE!!!

    *~You're IT Bert!~*

    Hold on to the thread
    The currents will shift
  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    really nicely done.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."
    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    Jeanie wrote:
    Now I get it! :)

    Of course I already liked it but was having trouble with the relevance of the title. :confused::o

    Excellent stuff J. :)
    did you read Byrnzie's thread? I'm really strongly pro-choice and utterly despise the notion of pro-lifers but I thought, what would I do if the shoe was on the other thought? It's really rare that I decide to approach something from a whole other side.

    but thanks :) I'm really glad you liked it.
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    I mean on the other foot of course...

    fuck this no editing system.
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    chadwick wrote:
    really nicely done.
    thank you :)
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
  • JeanieJeanie Posts: 9,446
    Jeremy1012 wrote:
    did you read Byrnzie's thread? I'm really strongly pro-choice and utterly despise the notion of pro-lifers but I thought, what would I do if the shoe was on the other thought? It's really rare that I decide to approach something from a whole other side.

    but thanks :) I'm really glad you liked it.

    Yes. :) Although I had read this before that and liked it. But the thread gave me my lightbulb moment! :D

    I think that's the thing isn't it? To see the shoe on the other side. ;)
    NOPE!!!

    *~You're IT Bert!~*

    Hold on to the thread
    The currents will shift
  • ByrnzieByrnzie Posts: 21,037
    Yep, that one cuts deep.
    It's hard to put into words what it means to deprive someone of a life, but you've nailed it there.
  • PegasusPegasus Posts: 3,754
    Jeanie wrote:
    Now I get it! :)

    Of course I already liked it but was having trouble with the relevance of the title. :confused::o

    Excellent stuff J. :)
    n the UK it is legal for termination to be carried out up to 24 weeks of pregnancy (which I think is way too long..and I'm completely pro-choice)
  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    Pegasus wrote:
    n the UK it is legal for termination to be carried out up to 24 weeks of pregnancy (which I think is way too long..and I'm completely pro-choice)
    I kind of agree. The problem is, if they brought the cut-off point forward, people would then argue "at 20 weeks a baby kicks at the sound of it's mother's voice" or whatever. There is no time limit that will really convince all people. I do know from experience though, one of my mother's friends gave birth after 23 weeks, the baby could still have been legally aborted. Of course his early years were full of health problems because he was so premature but he is now about 15 and a healthy teenager.
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
  • JeanieJeanie Posts: 9,446
    Jeremy1012 wrote:
    I kind of agree. The problem is, if they brought the cut-off point forward, people would then argue "at 20 weeks a baby kicks at the sound of it's mother's voice" or whatever. There is no time limit that will really convince all people. I do know from experience though, one of my mother's friends gave birth after 23 weeks, the baby could still have been legally aborted. Of course his early years were full of health problems because he was so premature but he is now about 15 and a healthy teenager.

    Well I have a lot of faith in women to do what they believe to be correct as quickly as possible, and I believe that most do this. I've never been one for this arbitrary time limit anyway. There are instances when a late term abortion is highly apropriate, unfortunate and unpopular as that may be. My view is these are decisions that are to be made with the best medical advice, the best of medical attention and are deeply personal and concern no one but those people involved in the situation. My view holds the same for premature births. Well for any birth really. :)
    NOPE!!!

    *~You're IT Bert!~*

    Hold on to the thread
    The currents will shift
  • theskyabovetheskyabove Posts: 77
    hmm...

    I won't engage the debate. In fact, I wish I didn't read what this poem's about. I much prefer secrets on this topic, as the choice is a rather private matter.

    But I do like the poem very much. Less, when I find what it's about, but more when I forget.
  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    theskyabove wrote:
    hmm...

    I won't engage the debate. In fact, I wish I didn't read what this poem's about. I much prefer secrets on this topic, as the choice is a rather private matter.

    But I do like the poem very much. Less, when I find what it's about, but more when I forget.
    I kind of agree with you. I ordinarily wouldn't spell out meaning so obviously but it was relevant to another discussion. I'm glad you like it anyway :)
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
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