Your Breaking My Heart and it Hurts

reeferchiefreeferchief Posts: 3,569
edited October 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
It's how you want me to be, that I cant
never enough, always wanting me to change
wanting to mould me, into your vision
me being me is not good enough for thee
no happy medium can be achieved
for all I'm a happy, loving individual
happy to help when needed
to bring in a salary
to help with your writing problems
to be an ear when you need listening to
to be a father to your children
to put you first
to tidy the house and most importantly
to love you, like your the most important person in my life
it is still not enough
Remember I am still a person
with wants and needs
feelings that need to be soothed
problems that need discussing
please take me into consideration
when plotting your scheme
dont just treat me as an object
I am human after all
Your Breaking my heart and it hurts
Can not be arsed with life no more.
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  • The abbreviated form of 'you are' is you're, not 'your'. 'Your' is the possesive form of the word 'you'.

    So, YOUR, title should be YOU'RE breaking my heart and it hurts.

    Sorry, but I had to do it.
    It doesn't matter if you're male, female, or confused; black, white, brown, red, green, yellow; gay, lesbian; redneck cop, stoned; ugly; military style, doggy style; fat, rich or poor; vegetarian or cannibal; bum, hippie, virgin; famous or drunk-you're either an asshole or you're not!

    -C Addison
  • reeferchiefreeferchief Posts: 3,569
    Scubascott wrote:
    The abbreviated form of 'you are' is you're, not 'your'. 'Your' is the possesive form of the word 'you'.

    So, YOUR, title should be YOU'RE breaking my heart and it hurts.

    Sorry, but I had to do it.

    Thanks, maybe there was a hint of sinicisim and irony in it, no?
    Given the context and the content of what I wrote.
    Can not be arsed with life no more.
  • I don't know. Was there?

    I didn't mean any offense. I'm just anal about that kind of thing.

    By the way, you misspelled scinicism.
    It doesn't matter if you're male, female, or confused; black, white, brown, red, green, yellow; gay, lesbian; redneck cop, stoned; ugly; military style, doggy style; fat, rich or poor; vegetarian or cannibal; bum, hippie, virgin; famous or drunk-you're either an asshole or you're not!

    -C Addison
  • reeferchiefreeferchief Posts: 3,569
    Scubascott wrote:
    I don't know. Was there?

    I didn't mean any offense. I'm just anal about that kind of thing.

    By the way, you misspelled scinicism.

    Yes there was, and thanks for the english lesson, it's really what I needed when I'm feeling like shit.
    Can not be arsed with life no more.
  • Sorry. I'm an arsehole. Just ignore me.
    It doesn't matter if you're male, female, or confused; black, white, brown, red, green, yellow; gay, lesbian; redneck cop, stoned; ugly; military style, doggy style; fat, rich or poor; vegetarian or cannibal; bum, hippie, virgin; famous or drunk-you're either an asshole or you're not!

    -C Addison
  • reeferchiefreeferchief Posts: 3,569
    Synicisim
    Can not be arsed with life no more.
  • reeferchiefreeferchief Posts: 3,569
    Fuck it I give up mods delete my poem please.
    Can not be arsed with life no more.
  • madjackmadjack Posts: 213
    Reeferchief, I hope i'm wrong but from your poems sounds as though your going through a rough time. I've lost the love of my life back some time ago, she was the light that lead me through dark times. She moved on, and I just couldn't let go for a long time. I still love her but I'm happy shes happy, I could have never given her what she wanted anyway. In time the pain starts leaving you, memories fade, feelings fade away also. I use to be scared to be alone, but I've come to realize that might be my fate and I'll be alright by that. No matter what anyone else told me or no matter who tried to comfort me, I was down. Time is cure, it takes time, time will eventually show you what is meant and what is not meant to be. For now be strong, good road is up ahead.
    Come on and play on the edge of life with me. Its fun and I love every minute of it!!!
  • reeferchiefreeferchief Posts: 3,569
    madjack wrote:
    Reeferchief, I hope i'm wrong but from your poems sounds as though your going through a rough time. I've lost the love of my life back some time ago, she was the light that lead me through dark times. She moved on, and I just couldn't let go for a long time. I still love her but I'm happy shes happy, I could have never given her what she wanted anyway. In time the pain starts leaving you, memories fade, feelings fade away also. I use to be scared to be alone, but I've come to realize that might be my fate and I'll be alright by that. No matter what anyone else told me or no matter who tried to comfort me, I was down. Time is cure, it takes time, time will eventually show you what is meant and what is not meant to be. For now be strong, good road is up ahead.

    I am Madjack thanks for the support and reading my poems, I appreciate it.:)
    Can not be arsed with life no more.
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    reefer... you sound like you're a good dude. doing everything you know how to do to LOVE this woman... actively. they say love is a verb, and well, you're the nike posterchild of the heart...

    BUT

    if the one you love wants you to be something other than who you are...

    fucking, fuck them!

    that ain't love. that's bullshit.

    now, there's certainly wishing good will for your mate. wishing a better job, or even the ability to handle yourself better... or differently, in a given situation. not unlike you're here wishing your mate would do. you're asking her to love you differently (or, shoot... to maybe just love you, I don't know...)

    The cure here is to be compassionate with yourself, and with her. Tell her, "baby, I love you, but you're treating me like shit, and basically telling me that you don't want me around. And while that sucks, I'll go if that's what you want. You've got to show me you care about me, cuz I'm getting the shaft right now. I love you very much, but (well, shoot, just like you said in your piece) it hurts!"


    good luck.

    one more thing... it's hard to tell if people put up poems cuz they're hurting and want support, or if they're just writing for writing's sake. if you get grammatical or literary crit, and it's not what you're looking for, just blow it off OR try to do things at once. Vent your hurt, and become a better writer in the process ;)



    much elove... (ie, compassion from the void)
    Rachel
  • madjackmadjack Posts: 213
    Your right PastaNazi venting is a good, this fourm helps a person do that. It took me awhile to realize why would I want someone who doesn't want me. Once I came to realize that point, the pain started going away. I know deep down she knows I was good to her, she just needs me to hate her because she fell in love with another. What ever the reason, whatever she has done to me, I'll never hate. When this train ends I'll ride again because some how I got to carry on. Heard that in a song, music has alot to offer.
    Come on and play on the edge of life with me. Its fun and I love every minute of it!!!
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    music is the best :)
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