pretty

sicnevol
sicnevol Posts: 180
edited May 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Am I pretty to you?
Do you think of me Like I think of you?
I know that I want you too
Do you see me at all
Do you stare right throgh me?
Am I pretty to you?
I'm a worthy of you?

Will you ever want me?
That's two things we've got, Tape and Time.
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  • Innocent_Bystander
    Innocent_Bystander Posts: 615
    It's good, it's just a bit basic. I see the rythm and the rhyme, but it seems to have all been said before. If you expand on the concept, you could probably make it a great piece.
    Life reveals what is dealt through seasons
    Circle comes around each time
  • sicnevol
    sicnevol Posts: 180
    it just came into my head. i never really "write" I jsut put down my thoughts at the moment.
    That's two things we've got, Tape and Time.
  • Flash
    Flash Posts: 4
    a good start

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