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Let's write a song.

Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
edited December 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Who knows how to write a song? We need a game plan, strategy, charisma, and intuition. How many syllables? Does it need to rhyme? What should be the topic. Could someone who actually writes songs do the editing so that it makes sense? This person would be asked to revise the drafts after discussions. Anyone up for it? How about a song about listening? I'm open to changes in strategy. Thoughts? Suggestions?
There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    One suggestion. Music. ;)
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    One suggestion. Music. ;)
    See, I was planning on people like you who already write songs, to help out in that department. If someone could do up the music part, and post that the song is fast or slow or needs this many syllables etc, at least we could start a little something, you think?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    See, I was planning on people like you who already write songs, to help out in that department. If someone could do up the music part, and post that the song is fast or slow or needs this many syllables etc, at least we could start a little something, you think?


    Er, okay. I'll play with these chords:

    | Em7 F7 | Bbmaj7 Db7 | Gbmaj7 A7 | Dmaj7

    Later though. I'm busy here. Vacation is over. ;)
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    | Em7 F7 | Bbmaj7 Db7 | Gbmaj7 A7 | Dmaj7
    This song will be about the number 7? Could someone translate this for me. I just need the number of syllables? Should it rhyme?

    I'll start with the words, and please please edit if needed:

    Shamrock Grey brought down 7th Street
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Patience, patience. We need the music first. Rome wasn't built in a d





    a








    ;)
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Okay, it's a four four beat. Syncopate as many syllables as you like. I'm getting a nice, cheesy bossa nova thang going here.
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Okay, it's a four four beat. Syncopate as many syllables as you like. I'm getting a nice, cheesy bossa nova thang going here.
    If I remember my oboe lessons correctly, 8 syllables should be just fine, and then in the third line we'll add a little blues hold so that it's 7 syllables. Bossa nova bossa nova bossa nova, let me figure out what that is.

    Shamrock Grey brought down 7th street
    wearing gloves of mystic white pearl
    She found answers within shop
    windows adjusting street length curls.

    Is that too light, do you need more brassy? A little help, people (and Fins of course)!
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    If I remember my oboe lessons correctly, 8 syllables should be just fine, and then in the third line we'll add a little blues hold so that it's 7 syllables. Bossa nova bossa nova bossa nova, let me figure out what that is.

    Shamrock Grey brought down 7th street
    wearing gloves of mystic white pearl
    She found answers within shop
    windows adjusting street length curls.

    Is that too light, do you need more brassy? A little help, people (and Fins of course)!






    More cowbell!!!
    More cowbell!!!
    More cowbell!!!


    http://www.encyclopediadramatica.com/images/1/10/Oyster2.gif
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    Shamrock Grey brought down 7th street
    wearing a white pearl cowbell


    Nope, nope, I just can't do it.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Me get good idea
    You could write velly good song
    all in haiku, yes?



    ;)
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Me get good idea
    You could write velly good song
    all in haiku, yes?



    ;)
    I want to write seductive delicious blues! Cowbell is blues, isn't it or maybe bluegrass. Ok, I'll bow out so that someone else could start the first part. Are we going to have one of those things that keep repeating itself - chorus, that's it. Are we going to have a chorus?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Okay, how about a twelve bar:


    Ah woke up early in dah mornin'
    Ah got duh over thirties nasal hair growin' in duh nostrils bogey bad blues
    yuh
    Ah said uh woke up early in dah mornin'
    Ah got duh over thirties nasal hair growin' in duh nostrils bogey bad blues
    uh huh
    Ah cleared dem bogeys widdout warnin'
    Ah squashed em out by clampin' mah nose in between two shoes
    in between two shoes, y'uh huh



    :cool::cool:
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Okay, how about a twelve bar:


    Ah woke up early in dah mornin'
    Ah got duh over thirties nasal hair growin' in duh nostrils bogey bad blues
    yuh
    Ah said uh woke up early in dah mornin'
    Ah got duh over thirties nasal hair growin' in duh nostrils bogey bad blues
    uh huh
    Ah cleared dem bogeys widdout warnin'
    Ah squashed em out by clampin' mah nose in between two shoes
    in between two shoes, y'uh huh



    :cool::cool:
    I just don't think we are on the same page here, Fins. I can't just can't write a song about items inside noses whether they are hairs, "bogey", peas, pencils, you name it, just can't do it. How about walking . . . and the number 7?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    I just don't think we are on the same page here, Fins. I can't just can't write a song about items inside noses whether they are hairs, "bogey", peas, pencils, you name it, just can't do it. How about walking . . . and the number 7?


    Seven Bogies walking. Set in a Casablanca fan convention. We can do it. And we need seven Ingrid Bergmans too. Seven Bergs for Seven Bogies.
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Seven Bogies walking. Set in a Casablanca fan convention. We can do it. And we need seven Ingrid Bergmans too. Seven Bergs for Seven Bogies.
    That's it!

    You got me laughing there, Fins - Good job!

    Of the seven Bogies (and I take it this is way in the future when cloning has reached a level to clone dead movie actors) which one turns his head away from one of the Ingrid Bergmans and why? That's the ticket, there's the story, you think?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • dunkmandunkman Posts: 19,646
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    That's it!

    You got me laughing there, Fins - Good job!

    Of the seven Bogies (and I take it this is way in the future when cloning has reached a level to clone dead movie actors) which one turns his head away from one of the Ingrid Bergmans and why? That's the ticket, there's the story, you think?

    sorry to butt in....

    you have to find out which one of the Bogies runs... ;)

    who is the runny Bogie??
    oh scary... 40000 morbidly obese christians wearing fanny packs invading europe is probably the least scariest thing since I watched an edited version of The Care Bears movie in an extremely brightly lit cinema.
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    dunkman1974 wrote:
    sorry to butt in....

    you have to find out which one of the Bogies runs... ;)

    who is the runny Bogie??
    We're not talking nose issues, right? I just can't deal with nose-issues-laden lyrics. It's like Dirty Frank, which although well done, grosses me out. When I walked along first avenue in Seattle once near Pike Place Market a man had a dripping nose, and I almost threw up.

    I don't know if I've seen a movie with whats-his-name running, but hey, anything is possible.

    If people are really set on doing a song riddled with nose-issues I can step down, and just watch from the sidelines. I'm writing this paragraph in good humor, by the way not sarcasm.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I know a few sea shanties. We could write one. A slow seductive sea shanty.
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    I know a few sea shanties. We could write one. A slow seductive sea shanty.
    Isn't a shanty a hut? Or is it like Gordon Lightfoot songs - The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald? I could do sea stuff, I'll focus on the lighthouse someone else focuses on the water part.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ooo arrrr thricketee:

    http://www.geocities.com/captcutlass/Tune.html


    These be shanties, oooo arrrr.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Oi got a big ole lighthouse, ma'am,
    Yodel-lo oi tiddle-o
    Tall and proud and famous, ma'am,
    Yodel-liddle oi po.
    Moi lighthouse girth is wondrous, ma'am,
    Hoodle hiddle yiddle I piddle-o,
    Firm and good and sinuous, ma'am,
    Jugga jugga jiggle hi ho.

    Oi'll guide dose boats, a splashin', ma'am,
    Wet as night, oi fiddle-o
    Oi'll stand their rainsoak lashin', ma'am,
    With moi big bright pole hey ho.
    Moi lighthouse bell needs washin', ma'am,
    Come bring your boat high hither ho!
    I'll toll it like a passion ma'am!
    Moi bell will never wither no
    Moi bell will never wither no


    yiddle ay po!
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Oi got a big ole lighthouse, ma'am,
    Yodel-lo oi tiddle-o
    Tall and proud and famous, ma'am,
    Yodel-liddle oi po.
    Moi lighthouse girth is wondrous, ma'am,
    Hoodle hiddle yiddle I piddle-o,
    Firm and good and sinuous, ma'am,
    Jugga jugga jiggle hi ho.

    Oi'll guide dose boats, a splashin', ma'am,
    Wet as night, oi fiddle-o
    Oi'll stand their rainsoak lashin', ma'am,
    With moi big bright pole hey ho.
    Moi lighthouse bell needs washin', ma'am,
    Come bring your boat high hither ho!
    I'll toll it like a passion ma'am!
    Moi bell will never wither no
    Moi bell will never wither no


    yiddle ay po!
    Maybe less seductive and more blues. You and your lighthouses Fins, always wanting to point out those lighthouses. To most people it's a building, but NOOOO.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    I saw him scout the sun for signs, ma'am,
    Yodel-lo oi tiddle-o
    Weather marked his age in lines, ma'am,
    Yodel-liddle oi po.
    He reads the storms, is wondrous, ma'am,
    Hoodle hiddle yiddle I piddle-o,
    But look down if he sights you, ma'am,
    Jugga jugga jiggle hi ho.

    Only a few have known him, ma'am,
    Silently stares, oi fiddle-o
    They stand in storms searching signs, ma'am,
    For eyes of golden rims hey ho.
    If you want a wander's life, ma'am,
    Come bring your boat high hither ho!
    He'll add darkness to your eyes ma'am!
    The bell will never sounding low
    The bell will never sounding low



    OK, Fins, and anyone else, edit away this little shanty.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Boom The CatBoom The Cat Posts: 482
    Anyway I can help out?
    no matter where you go,
    there you are.

    - brain of c
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    Boom The Cat wrote:
    Anyway I can help out?
    Add, delete, whatever. It's in the court of the person who is willing to play the game.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    Should we start another one? Whose turn?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    One way we could do this is to start with a song, change the lyrics, and change the music. When I changed Fins lyrics to the lighthouse song, that was fun, and there's a trace of both his version, and my version. So, let's start with a song and change it. Should we start with a PJ song because most of us may know it, or is that sacriligious? What's a good song that all of us around the world would know? A holiday song? Winter Wonderland? What do you think?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Boom The CatBoom The Cat Posts: 482
    yeah, can we slow the tune down a little?
    no matter where you go,
    there you are.

    - brain of c
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    A slow sea shanty? :D
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    A slow sea shanty? :D
    Ok :)

    Work songs/gospel became one form of the blues didn't they, and a sea shanty is a work song, correct? So, that's not too far off the mark. To make a song slow in the words it has to not end so much with t or p maybe have some words with sm sp ds or whatever. What do you think? If we wrote a sea shanty about sea swells and sand that would work, right? You can't sing all of those s's quickly, eh?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
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