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the sunny part of the day

violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
edited September 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
your toothless grin
it makes me smile

your clown personality
it makes me laugh

when your eyes fill
so do mine

those little hands
they get bigger each day

along with the rest of you

the way you take everything in
and think it through

your courage now in facing new things
your want for knowledge of everything
your sense of humor, and man is that big

i'm so proud,
i love you, baby
You ask me to enter
But then You make me crawl
And I can't be holding on
To what You got
When all You've got is hurt
----
Underneath this smile lies everything
All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
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  • Chad SexingtonChad Sexington Posts: 30
    yesterday, you noticed the caring in one of my poems. well, the caring in this one shows through much stronger. this really made me smile. :)
    "Did I say corpse hatch? I meant innocence tube" - Mr. Burns
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    yea? cool!
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • Chad SexingtonChad Sexington Posts: 30
    Originally posted by violet ray
    yea? cool!

    yep. and thank you; it's nice to see such unabashed positivity around here. :)
    "Did I say corpse hatch? I meant innocence tube" - Mr. Burns
  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    that's wonderful violet, you should print it out and save it, really, that's great!
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
  • the unseenthe unseen Posts: 372
    FUCK YEA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!






    - )



    you rule.

    yes indeedy.......

    you fucking rule!!!!!!!
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    wow, thanks guys


    and unseen?

    you have me sitting here
    with this big ass dopey grin
    :D

    thank you so much for making me do my homework.
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • setaside2setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    you know I envy you for being able to write about your kids.

    I love my little ones more than anything but I've never been able to write poetry about them. I've done prose, but never poetry.

    you rock for being able to state these things in poetic form. And your little one rocks for knowing how to inspire mommy.

    kudos to both of you.

    seta
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • the unseenthe unseen Posts: 372
    you're grinning?


    i have wet spots on my shirt.......

    i'm so fucking proud of you right now.




    thank you.
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    Originally posted by setaside2
    you know I envy you for being able to write about your kids.

    I love my little ones more than anything but I've never been able to write poetry about them. I've done prose, but never poetry.

    you rock for being able to state these things in poetic form. And your little one rocks for knowing how to inspire mommy.

    kudos to both of you.

    seta

    hmmm..i wouldn't call what i do poetry...but thank you so much :)
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    Originally posted by the unseen
    you're grinning?


    i have wet spots on my shirt.......

    i'm so fucking proud of you right now.




    thank you.

    grinning, unseen! i'm serious. like this: :D

    thank YOU.
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Originally posted by violet ray
    hmmm..i wouldn't call what i do poetry...but thank you so much :)

    i would :)


    nice :D
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    Originally posted by PastaNazi
    i would :)


    nice :D

    thanks, pn :)
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
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