dark sides

violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
edited August 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
i don’t think you realized
the marks you left on me
with your drop dead eyes
and words that touched me
deep within
you gave me a taste
of your darker side
making me want to
find mine
explore it
get lost in it
with you
You ask me to enter
But then You make me crawl
And I can't be holding on
To what You got
When all You've got is hurt
----
Underneath this smile lies everything
All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
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Comments

  • Life is delicious. Nice writing.
    I was alone
    I took a ride
    I didn't know
    What I would
    Find there.
  • Very Nice
    Don't need a raincoat, I'm already wet..
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    thank you both :)
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • nice simple piece of writing. love it
    there'll be time for laughin'
    there's no time to cry
    soon i will be leavin'
    look me in the eye
    no matter what's in front of me
    it's your face that i'll see
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    thank you, boss.
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    this is bumpable.....hehehehe....it's succinct and has nice rhythm....:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Obi OnceObi Once Posts: 918
    mmm getting lost, yea, nice writing violet!
    your light's reflected now
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