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violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
edited August 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
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You ask me to enter
But then You make me crawl
And I can't be holding on
To what You got
When all You've got is hurt
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Underneath this smile lies everything
All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
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  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    Holy Shit that sounds alot like the song I wrote called "For A Moment"...you can listen to it on my website. Different, but similar...and I even used the word blinds.
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    good stuff violet ray, keep on working on this one, I think it has more life to it.
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    .
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    Originally posted by violet ray
    no, there's no more

    I am sorry to hear you say that, I think there is, but if not, I hope you keep writing, in the long run, it might help you see things so much clearer.
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
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