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The Half of It

PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
edited June 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
On a night when the moon was but
a fraction of itself
You came to me, as if in a dream
Warm and tender
with silence for a cloak.
You poured the sky out,
covering me in stars.
And scars.
For on a night when the moon was but
a fraction of itself
You abandoned me, as if in a nightmare
Bleak and unfeeling
with deceit for a mask.
You darkened the universe,
covering me in clouds.
And doubts.
On a night when you were but
a fraction of yourself,
I allowed you to break me, as if I were helpless
Ignorant and unknowing
with glass for a heart.
I poured my guts out,
covering you in tears.
And fears.
Looking at the same sky now,
it seems so empty.
As I am but a fraction
of who I used to be.
Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
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  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    is gorgeous
  • pearljoypearljoy Posts: 47
    though this moon is broken - I love this writing, it's beautifully
    pictured.......
    PearlJoy!!!!
  • PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
    Originally posted by john girl
    is gorgeous

    thanks!!!
    Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
  • suedesuede Posts: 247
    very cool. this is my favorite part...

    "You poured the sky out,
    covering me in stars.
    And scars."
  • Cherokee MistCherokee Mist Posts: 13
    Like this,
    with glass for a heart
    Can really relate.
  • PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
    Originally posted by suede
    very cool. this is my favorite part...

    "You poured the sky out,
    covering me in stars.
    And scars."

    Well hey there,
    I just stopped by your site.
    So check it out,
    though it is on the corny side.
    Later.
    Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
  • PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
    Originally posted by Cherokee Mist
    Like this,
    with glass for a heart
    Can really relate.

    well, we all want to relate somehow.
    even when it's not for the happiest reasons.
    thanks for reading!
    Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    I love the way you write.....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    Amazing just amazing....I love the way you write. Your references to the sky, moon and stars are so colorful...and beautiful. your poem so direct and to the point....yet somehow its not (in a good way). I don't know where you came from, but please stay...this board could definately use a poet like you.
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
    NAILZ100 AND ISN
    IT MEANS A LOT GETTING PROPS FROM YOU GUYS BECAUSE I LOVE LOVE LOVE YOUR POETRY!!!!!!!!!
    EVER SINCE I FOUND THIS SITE, I SIT AT WORK ALL DAY
    READING IT AND WANTING TO WRITE IN IT TOO!
    I AM SO GETTING FIRED!
    Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    "On a night when the moon was but
    a fraction of itself"

    I love that it started like that!

    "As I am but a fraction
    of who I used to be."

    I liked that it ended like that!

    I like that everything in between held it so together! :)

    'Tis a beuat, PJGirl2004!

    Just don't get fired, okay! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I love reading your work, PJGirl2004. Great to see all this inspired writing. As B.E. says, don't get fired though! ;)
  • PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
    WOW GUYS
    THANKS!
    I am beyond flattered.
    Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
  • ripple effectripple effect Posts: 87
    Wow.

    You truly have a gift for words and expression.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    omg... this was SUCH a beautiful piece of your soul....

    the truth, the structure, the gorgeous pictures painted...


    i'm in awe. i love this.
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
    THANKS ALL
    Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    oh...i'm speechless. i feel like you're in my mind.
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • SchlitzSchlitz Posts: 141
    That was beautiful. Keep them coming.
    i have to remain at top sassiness, even though my inner sass is struggling
  • A HitchHiker PoetA HitchHiker Poet Posts: 129
    Your words brought tears in my eyes
    Don't need a raincoat, I'm already wet..
  • ArieltkeArieltke Posts: 17
    or in this case type. good job pj girl that was simply touching. enough said.
  • Mr PyjamaMr Pyjama Posts: 253
    Wow thats really something, i was trying to quote my fav part but its just sooo good throughout! Congratulations you are a great poet/writer.
    Situations get fucked up and turned around sooner or later...
  • A HitchHiker PoetA HitchHiker Poet Posts: 129
    This what poetry is about
    Don't need a raincoat, I'm already wet..
  • Mr PyjamaMr Pyjama Posts: 253
    Hey just keeping this high on the board so i can read it again, its beautiful.
    Situations get fucked up and turned around sooner or later...
  • PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
    when people read my stuff it is nice. but to actually be complimented so much feels really good. even if everyone thought my words were idiotic, i'd still write because i love it and need to do it for me. sometimes it is hard putting your thoughts out there for others to read so openly. but if anyone at all can appreciate it or relate to it in some way, it makes me feel like i'm part of something special. thanks to all for making it so much easier to put my poems out there. i love reading all of yours too. way cool. thanks.
    Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    True talent should be recognized...it would be wrong to let it sit beneath the tattered binders and coiled paper forever...its too good.
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • PJGirl2004PJGirl2004 Posts: 58
    Geez, it seems like FOREVER ago that I wrote that. Man.
    Will You Still Love Me Tomorrow?
  • deadnotedeadnote Posts: 1,678
    everyone here seems to be jammin out poetry

    awesome writing
    set your laughter free

    dreamer in my dream

    we got the guns

    i love you,but im..............callin out.........callin out
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