someone gimme a hand with this...

Spot In The Sky

ive been so uninspired lately, havent written something in over a month now- so ive got an idea for something, but i dont know where to go with it- so if someone else wants to run with it, be my guest, or just give me something to start off...

ill leave the heat on low so i have an excuse to lay down next to you

...ok thats all i got so far, i just like the way it sounds, advice anyone?!

Kev

FinsburyParkCarrots

You want for it to snow, you want the chill
to glaze our windowframe, to make the moon
seem gleaming cold upon our windowsill
and have us cuddling for warmth. Yes, soon
I'll leave the heat down low as good excuse
to lay down next to you, to feel your head
upon my shoulder. Let the night's obtuse
silent dark allow love's flow to spread.

Ms. Haiku

Spot In The Sky wrote:

ill leave the heat on low so i have an excuse to lay down next to you

But then I'll catch a cold
as will you
and we will miss work
at the same time.

We will cough in unison.
We will reach for the same tissue box.
I will let you drink the last glass of orange juice
while I cover my head in three hats.

What could be better
to heal our hearts
while we heal our throats,
but fire-placed time.

jboelhow

Spot In The Sky wrote:

ive been so uninspired lately, havent written something in over a month now- so ive got an idea for something, but i dont know where to go with it- so if someone else wants to run with it, be my guest, or just give me something to start off...

ill leave the heat on low so i have an excuse to lay down next to you

...ok thats all i got so far, i just like the way it sounds, advice anyone?!

Kev

Hey Spot In The Sky,
I'm not going to write a poem in response, but give you what that line did for my imagination. As soon as I read it it felt like the couple had lost something in their relationship. The narrator seems to be trying to find a way to get it back. The sadness of the line alone screams to say that the poem should end in the same sadness. Anyway there is my thoughts. Want to see what you come up with.

Ali

i think that this line has alot to do with intimacy..so if you expand on the want of it,the desire,the taken away,the colors,nature...
you can do so much.
P.S. Doesn't writers block suck?
Good job:)

Spot In The Sky

thanks for the input guys, ill show you the "finished" product if i can ever compose all the loose ends. thanks again.

Kev