ABC's (title wont make sense to anyone but me- so haha...suckers)

Spot In The Sky

The first time that I saw your face
I was a stranger in this strange new place
That’s when I caught a glimpse of you
As the traffic passed through
I was shooting for at least one glance
But I’m the new guy so I’ll never get that chance
I’ll keep on trying to fit in
I just can’t keep up with all this macho drinking
You’re just fresh meat for the hunt
In this all boys club
We addressed formalities and
Compared which schools we attend
That’s when I knew
You were too good to be true
But I’ll keep on trying to fit in
So I can rise to the occasion
When the time for it comes
I’ll show you that I can be the one
The plan now is just to wait around
Till someone else becomes that new guy in town
Maybe the stars didn’t align for us yet
But don’t forget, the key word is yet
I’ll just keep on trying to fit in
Until you find me in your conversation
There are water cooler talks
Of the drunken ways you walk
And I cringe at the thought of you
Conceding such a mind to booze
There just this way about the way you smile
You make this wait seem all worth the while
So I’ll just keep on trying to fit in

Spot In The Sky

psh- well I liked it...bitches.

suede

yeah...fockers

Spot In The Sky

even though no one cares, this is the finish copy of that shit up aboe....

The first time that I saw your face
I was a stranger in this strange new place
That’s when I caught a glimpse of you
As the traffic passed through
I was shooting for at least one glance
But I’m the new guy so I’ll never get that chance
I’ll keep on trying to fit in
I just can’t keep up with all this macho drinking
You’re just fresh meat for the hunt
In this all boys club
We addressed formalities and
Compared which schools we attend
That’s when I knew
You were too good to be true
But I’ll keep on trying to fit in
So I can rise to the occasion
When the time for it comes
I’ll show you that I can be the one
The plan now is just to wait around
Till someone else becomes that new guy in town
Maybe the stars didn’t align for us yet
Maybe they didn’t know we already met
I’ll just keep on trying to fit in
Until you find me in your conversation
There are water cooler talks
Of the drunken ways you walk
And I cringe at the thought of you
Conceding such a mind to booze
There just this way about the way you smile
You make this wait seem all worth the while
So I’ll just keep on trying to fit in
I pulled into the parking lot about a quarter to three
Letting the song end that I had on repeat
That’s when I saw the two of you
As I looked through my rear view
Parked in your favorite spots
Back left corner of the parking lot
Watched you lean in for the kiss
I couldn’t bear witness to this
I thought fast and acted faster
Failing to plan is a planned disaster
Rolled down my window quick
Screamed ‘hello’ but the sound seemed to sink
He may have won this battle, sure
But he’s still far from winning this war
I’ll keep on trying to fit in
Even if this is a war I can’t win

ISN

intrepid lovers invariably win......:)

I wish I knew the latin for 'love conquers all'.....something like amor omnia vicit.....

(by the way....I saved the first version and have read it three or four times.....seeing as I'm so fond of that one......I won't replace it with the updated version)

Spot In The Sky

wow- thanks man. i read it a few times too...but probably for other reasons. i just like the way it goes, and theres a tune in my head ill never get out cause i dont know how to play. probably be a wise investment.

suede

i see a lot of good stuff in both versions. if you make it into a song, i could see leaving out about half of it. don't take that the wrong way. i think if it was a little shorter and more specific, then it would have a greater impact. you're a good writer, and you know i think that. i try not to be critical on here...since NO ONE ever is, but take it for what it's worth, maybe with a grain of frosted flakes, too. ...it seems like i always analyze YOUR poems...i don't know why, really. i do like the change*s*...changes you made.

Spot In The Sky

what do you think should be left out if there was music added?
i have no music intuition, never made it- dont know how.

ISN

don't ask suede for ad-vice......huh......he's jus feelin his way like the rest of us......anyway.....you're on the right track