let's shoot crap....

ISN

or carp if they're free
let's go fishing
jus you and me.....
let's talk beer....
and smoke and get fried....
toasted by the sun....
let's go swimming
in Vancouver
in the Spring....
let's watch dragonflies
in the canyon
and imagine
starfish growing
out of ladies' drawers.....
their bloomers.....
let's watch flowers blooming
and cycle madly
before we drive to Mexico
and see the place
let's erase
the in-between
and let's jus shoot some crap.....
blow some rings.....
drink some brews.....
and screw some screws.....
let's shoot crap....
chew the cud.....
dance in mud.....
go to San Fran
and man,
let's shoot the crap....
or else.....
let's talk and sing and dance
and shit like that.....
fukkin whatever
let's shoot the crap

coleen

i really liked the cadence to this one and the images morphing from one set of images to another by way of a transitional phrase.

i dunno why but it made me smile the way that some of bukowski's more upbeat poems make me smile.

ISN

thx....honster....I wrote it really quick.....cos I was thinkin' crapshoot....shoot crap....etc....and cos frankly I jus did....heheheheh....how you doin?

coleen

don't mention it.

most of the stuff i've posted is written just the way you've described...another poetry forum member suggested i give that a try and i've enjoyed that un-edited off the cuff raw as it happens feeling.

keep posting sunshine, i enjoy reading your offerings.

ISN

aw thx honster....ur a sweetheart.....:)

TyeDye

I dont know what goes on in thathead of yours ISN.... but I like it