rhythm and rhyme

ISNISN Posts: 1,700
edited August 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I've got a lot of crazy ideas
ones that wouldn't stand up to logic
which I take out like fetishes
or like my little weed garden
which I have to nurture....
I'm paranoid, and it festers
my brain is infected
and I get dejected by it....
I have a brain infection
and court rejection
hoping to worsen my state
I need the release of complete breakdown
and entering hospital gates
I need to rave, and foam at the mouth
in order to exorcise this terrible
bout
of honesty that compels me
to say exactly what I'm thinking
on a certain date or time
I can't do it with rhythm
but I can do it with rhyme
....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
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  • I'm reminded of the chapter "The Ghost of the Weed Garden" in RD Laing's "The Divided Self", when reading this work.

    http://laingsociety.org/biblio/divself.htm
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    thx Fins, what a bonus, to get a link.....I'm going to read it.....I read The Divided Self, because one of my psychiatrists - Dr Rosen, was a bit radical, and I fancied that he was following Laing.......but I'll be blowed if I can remember anything about the book.....(I also read Foucault), but my memory is shot, but that's okay, cos I don't miss it...:D....(I like Jung - somehow I think all the knowledge I've read is in my sub-conscious somewhere, forming me, and guiding me).........
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    Ontological insecurity begins in childhood, or even earlier, in infancy, due to an absence of bonding and reciprocity between a mother and her new born child. In such cases, the mother does not experience, affirm or respond to the infant's genuine needs and feelings, and tries to mold the infant's behavior and experience to meet her own needs and expectations. As a result, the infant is only affirmed by the mother (or parent) when and if its adopts a "false self".

    thank you Finsbury, I'm afraid I'll have to re-read that book......this is exactly what happened to me........by my mother.......really hell, but it just got worse and worse with the mental illness, and she was a Psychiatrist, so she bloody should have known better.......she kept repeating like a chorus, how she couldn't bond with me while I was a baby, and then proceeded to abuse me to the hilt
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN wrote:
    thank you Finsbury, I'm afraid I'll have to re-read that book......this is exactly what happened to me........by my mother.......really hell, but it just got worse and worse with the mental illness, and she was a Psychiatrist, so she bloody should have known better.......she kept repeating like a chorus, how she couldn't bond with me while I was a baby, and then proceeded to abuse me to the hilt

    Bears shit in the woods, and a lot of shrinks are gaga. These are two Absolute Truths.
  • Bears shit in the woods, and a lot of shrinks are gaga. These are two Absolute Truths.

    :D LOL!

    I like when you just belt out what your thinking, ISN! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    it's my most AND least attractive qaulity, but it doesn't help me cut a swathe through society........I'm torn between the knowledge that people are frauds, for the most part, excepting a lot of people on this board, and the knowledge that I'll probably get lynched one day
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN wrote:
    it's my most AND least attractive qaulity, but it doesn't help me cut a swathe through society........I'm torn between the knowledge that people are frauds, for the most part, excepting a lot of people on this board, and the knowledge that I'll probably get lynched one day

    Yeah, I know what you mean about people--they smile so sweetly as they stick that knife in your back. Try not to let it get to ya, sweetie, there's a lot of great people out there too! :)

    LOL! I highly doubt you'll get lynched-oh my, ISN--lynched!!! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    I'm just beginning to realise that most of the world aren't complete shits......I only began to realise that today.......I guess we just learn, even when we're not trying.......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN wrote:
    I'm just beginning to realise that most of the world aren't complete shits......I only began to realise that today.......I guess we just learn, even when we're not trying.......

    :) It is a good feeling to know that there are good people out there, helping, caring, sharing and loving people. Warms the heart and softens the soul. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    it does.....I'm quite shy.....and strong too, but somehow people make you feel bad sometimes.......I only see the best in people until they start hurting me for whatever reasons they have, but here in Australia.......everyone is your friend......it's a great experience to be guaranteed a smile wherever you go, and to get good vibes all day long........:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • People here in Canada are pretty nice too, can't say they're all smiling those good vibe smiles all the time but generally, the people are good. :) I'd absolutely love to visit Australia some day!!! Oooo, that'd be sweet! I've only ever been to the US so it's a little dream of mine to get off this continent and travel abraod. I figure I should be able to afford it some day----like when I retire! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    come to Australia......why is everything so expensive? why do we scratch and scrape.....? if only everyone was like us, there'd be no need for money......:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • I'm ALWAYS saying that money would be unnecessary if we could just all work together, peacefully! Why does that seem to get met with quizzical looks? Guess we're just brainwashed into thinking that cash is the be all end all---such a shame. As long as it doen't blacken our souls, I think we'll be okay, girlfriend. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I like pot gardens.....?
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Ali wrote:
    I like pot gardens.....?


    who doesn't?


    let's get em!
    i'm a thief... and a liar...

    see Ed's church?--he's breathing fire.....
  • ISN wrote:
    I've got a lot of crazy ideas
    ones that wouldn't stand up to logic
    which I take out like fetishes
    or like my little weed garden
    which I have to nurture....
    I'm paranoid, and it festers
    my brain is infected
    and I get dejected by it....
    I have a brain infection
    and court rejection
    hoping to worsen my state
    I need the release of complete breakdown
    and entering hospital gates
    I need to rave, and foam at the mouth
    in order to exorcise this terrible
    bout
    of honesty that compels me
    to say exactly what I'm thinking
    on a certain date or time
    I can't do it with rhythm
    but I can do it with rhyme

    That was fantastic. I can tell you have been doing this for a very long time. It's interesting how it ends because the rhyme was there throughout but what was even stronger was your rhythm. :-) Great stuff!
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    hey, that's cool that you picked up on that.....I love rhythm, and am crazy about rhyme......thanks for your compliments.....:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
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