the future

ISN

the future is on the bottom of the sea
it has no form for you or me
the future is unfathomable
and will bring changes
for good or bad

if we could unblock the artist's pen
and see into his murky den
the writer of the next few pages
would rip out all the former ages
and leave us all to roam at will

if the future into the past did spill

but Einstein's clever little brain
for all his general theses
could not stop time
which will maintain
this ignorant dumb species

in time linear...progressing on
although for the purposes of this pom
a trifling thing, yes so it is.....
I'd like the future now, please

pacifier

today is only tomorrow's yesterday. The future is on it's way, don't worry about that, it's something you can't control. Just prepare your life/yourself to be ready to accept good things when they are presented to you.

that poem sounded sad or frustrated, like your looking for answers that aren't clear yet.

I am the answer to a question never asked
I am a product of my future, not my past

it occurred to me a few years ago that everything I was going through, good and bad, had its reason, and that i had to be where i was at that moment to get to where i was going. I used that moment of clarity in hindsight to create a clearer and more hopeful foresight.

ISN

that poem sounded sad or frustrated, like your looking for answers that aren't clear yet

thanks Pacifier ....I think it's more a case of being frustrated about not being able to articulate what I wanted to in this poem......I'm really looking forward to a wonderful future, judging by this last year, and I wanted to express how weird it is to be expecting good things around the corner, but not knowing for sure.....does that make sense.......the poem isn't very good, because I couldn't get it to work, so any crits/revisions are welcome

pacifier

oh ok, it was just some words like...

murky, no form, at the bottom of the sea (where we can't reach it), talking about an ignorant dumb species and asking for the future now...i thought it just seemed frustrating. The only point of hope i saw was the "changes for GOOD or bad" like there was some hope, but it was just a roll of the dice whether you got the good or the bad part. Oh and i guess becuase you are asking for the future you must see hope, but it seemed more like to escape the present than to embrass what is coming, if you know what I mean. Obviously I totally misinturpretted what you were saying. but then again a poem is going to be interpretted differently everytime it is read.

ISN

yeah, I guess I'm not happy with this poem, it's pretty crap - but your interpretation is fine - I wasn't able to express my thoughts for a change.....!!!! heheheheeh - it jus ended up being something different to what I set out to achieve......wow, how'd that happen?

depopulationINC

I like this poem. to me it says (even though it does not appear it is really what you meant) 1st segment - you cant see the future...You have now real idea of what it will bring 2nd - if you could see the future you could forget the past, and accomlish ANYthing 3rd - "if the future into the past did spill" (I LOVE this line) then to me it says it doesnt matter who you are, the future is unavoidable 4th you dont know what the future will bring, you cant stop it, but you are ready for it

idunno, thats what I saw. I like it

ISN

I like this poem. to me it says (even though it does not appear it is really what you meant) 1st segment - you cant see the future...You have now real idea of what it will bring 2nd - if you could see the future you could forget the past, and accomlish ANYthing 3rd - "if the future into the past did spill" (I LOVE this line) then to me it says it doesnt matter who you are, the future is unavoidable 4th you dont know what the future will bring, you cant stop it, but you are ready for it

that about sums it up ...... but I intended to prise into the future.....I guess I couldn't unlock it.....my intention was to object to a beautiful future I see ahead for me and my baby, not being here for me now......not being graspable.....just out of reach, and finally realising that I can't promise us that beautiful future, because it's impossible to reach ahead.....reading the poem again, I am happy with it now......thanks depop......

depopulationINC

anytime. I could tell the passages are heartfelt. BTW, I think that this would be a great song to. A few minor changes to give it rythyme, but still keep the passion.

ISN

thanks .....I've never written anything close to lyrics.....you can change it if you want.....I'm so doggone tired right now......I can't do a thing......I might put on a movie.........after I've cooked dinner......gotta go......

Being Enlightened

No, ISN, we can't predict the future, all we can do is try the best we can and keep hope in heart.

I too really loved this line: "if the future into the past did spill". It was perfect how that line stands alone in your poem, it worked so well.

grooveamatic

My favorite topic: time. I write about it constantly but rarely have I got it as succinct as you did here, ISN. Such an elusive and difficult topic. A unique plan of attack. Well done!

ISN

thanks, Being....I can definitely take credit for getting myself out of the rut I was in in London, so as to facilitate better things happening for me....:)

thanks, Groove - it is an elusive subject.....which I never really realised until I tried writing a poem about it......it's elusive in practice and in theory.....bummer!!!!

ISN

this one is definitely better....hope you don't mind me posting it here depop.....

the future is on the bottom of the sea
it has no form for you
it has no time for me
the future is unfathomable
for good
for bad
the changes are unimaginable

if the future into the past did roll
we would lose all control

if we could unblock the artist's pen
and see into his murky den
the writer of the next few pages
would rip out all the former ages
and leave us all to roam at will

if the future into the past did spill
we would squander it at will

but Einstein's clever little brain
for all his general theses (pl of thesis)
could not stop time
nor the visions of Socrates
never could maintain
this ignorant dumb species

if the future into the past did blend
our dreams would never mend

depopulationINC

why would I mind....its you words, I just added a few of my own. I am glad you like the changes I made, but your poem is perfect as is. I just cant help but make lyrics of anything I hear, and this was an amazing poem.

ISN

it's funny how I couldn't express the really positive hopes I have for the future, cos it's hard to get into the future.....so I ended up writing that poem and I wasn't happy......I do like your improvements......maybe if you can get it even better, you might sing it one day.......don't leave.......gotta go trawl through all the threads......to see if anyone has written anything brilliant.....now

depopulationINC

thought I would pull up one of my old favs. This is one of the poems that attracted me to start posting here. I still read this occassionally.

wonder how ISN is these days.

pearlmutt

i hope ISN and baby are well.

thanks for pulling this up depop!

grooveamatic

ISN and baby are doing perfectly fine. I spoke to her (via e-mail) today. She sends her regards to everybody.

depopulationINC

grooveamatic wrote:

ISN and baby are doing perfectly fine. I spoke to her (via e-mail) today. She sends her regards to everybody.

cool, tell her I said hi back when you have a chance.

pearlmutt

thanks groover, and tell her hi for me too, and that i'm sorry but i lost her email -- thanks again!

grooveamatic

I've been told to tell everyone that ISN can be found hanging out here:

http://www.imforums.com

Her name is still ISN. I doubt you'll have trouble finding her. She's a posting monster over there.

pearlmutt

thanks groovie!

EvilToasterElf

when in doubt dredge something outa the vault, there was a lot of talent here that disappeared