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life, death and rebirth

pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
a smile touched his face
she melted
never seen such beauty
as his soul
knew forever
she would want to make him happy
just to keep that look
upon his face
took him in
and held him closer
fed him daily
from her soul
yet still the smile faded
tears fall
a flower grows
rising like the corners of his mouth
they love once more
life, it had to sleep
but woke again
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  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    I like the circular movement, it becomes evident nearer to the end, and it whirls around. Very nice.
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  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    Bibliobella wrote:
    I like the circular movement, it becomes evident nearer to the end, and it whirls around. Very nice.

    this i just scribbled down now, started writing, but didn't know where I was heading, once he lost his smile i had to decided whether it stayed that way or whether it would return, and being the eternal optimist it had to return :)
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    This is really beautiful. I had a mental picture while reading this.
    I especially like the following:
    "a smile touched his face
    she melted
    never seen such beauty"
    I love a beautiful smile!!!
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    Bibliobella wrote:
    I like the circular movement, it becomes evident nearer to the end, and it whirls around. Very nice.

    very well stated.
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
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