he doesn't know

pacifier
pacifier Posts: 1,009
edited November 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
he doesn't know better than
to drink the sand
and call it water

she reaches out her hand
to rise him up
and dust him off

he doesn't understand this gesture
she looks so odd in that pose
he has seen others like her
how was he to know?

he shoos her away
the weird creature doesn't move
he rises to his knees and bares his teeth

she takes a step
is it worth it
does he want it
crouches down
and tries again

she wants to lead him
theres a place that she knows
where life is in abundance
and water overflows

will he go?
will he go?
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  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    nice one Ms Pacman

    :)
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    pacifier wrote:

    he shoos her away
    the weird creature doesn't move
    he rises to his knees and bares his teeth


    loved this part.
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    depopulationINC wrote:
    nice one Ms Pacman

    :)

    Thank you. what's this Pacman business:)? I like it :)
  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    pacifier wrote:
    Thank you. what's this Pacman business:)? I like it :)


    Idunno. I started it earlier tonight.
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    depopulationINC wrote:
    Idunno. I started it earlier tonight.

    I noticed :). and cosidering my love of eating dots, and turning at right angles, it's quite apt :)
  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    pacifier wrote:
    I noticed :). and cosidering my love of eating dots, and turning at right angles, it's quite apt :)

    yes, but can you outrun a ghost?

    (and no I am not calling you fat....I couldnt resist throughing that in)
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    depopulationINC wrote:
    (and no I am not calling you fat....I couldnt resist throughing that in)

    .............:p...........
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    depopulationINC wrote:
    yes, but can you outrun a ghost?

    I can out run ghost as good as the next [pac]man
  • twin1
    twin1 Posts: 902
    Good poem! I liked it alot. Isn't there a Ms. Pacman? You know with a bow and all? She eats dots too and outruns ghosts.
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    twin1 wrote:
    Good poem! I liked it alot. Isn't there a Ms. Pacman? You know with a bow and all? She eats dots too and outruns ghosts.

    yes, that is what popped into my head when I started that nic.
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • EvilToasterElf
    EvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    pacifier wrote:
    he doesn't know better than
    to drink the sand
    and call it water

    Nice opening
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    Beautiful:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Being Enlightened
    Being Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    I thought this was very sweet, Ms. Pacman--like you were in the process of trying leading the horse to water. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • twin2
    twin2 Posts: 894
    I too liked the opening. Good one.
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    I thought this was very sweet, Ms. Pacman--like you were in the process of trying leading the horse to water. :)

    more like trying to lead a horse to open green pastures with flowing creeks and lots of other nice horses when he doesn't know such a thing exists and doesn't want to leave his deserted barran land and quickly drying pond for fear of starving. if that makes sense. only it's a man. who doesn't know better.
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    thanks everyone for the nice comments
  • Being Enlightened
    Being Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    pacifier wrote:
    more like trying to lead a horse to open green pastures with flowing creeks and lots of other nice horses when he doesn't know such a thing exists and doesn't want to leave his deserted barran land and quickly drying pond for fear of starving. if that makes sense. only it's a man. who doesn't know better.

    Well, he's afraid of starving but if his pond is drying, he won't survive in his wasteland too long anyway. It's a shame he won't accept a helping hand. He doesn't understand, that's probably why he fears.
    pacifier wrote:
    thanks everyone for the nice comments

    Well, you're welcome--you deserved them because guess what??? Contrary to what you said in your "shout" thread, you don't suck! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen

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