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pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
edited November 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
life within a life, unknown, unseen
imagination is sometimes the only reality
I couldn't know if I didn't dream
of this life that's now existing
a life within a life takes form, takes shape
the only thing that I didn't make
I ask this life to take and take
and I will love for lovings sake
this life within a life, from birth to death
and when it seems like nothing's left
I'll give to it my dying breath
this thought in which my dreams are kept
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  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    I really like this MzP

    Great to see you post one
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    depopulationINC wrote:
    I really like this MzP

    Great to see you post one

    Thanks, it's been a while, I know. That's why I really felt like writing something today. sometimes it's good to know that your mind is still working :)
  • sistanumsysistanumsy Posts: 218
    Good one. It seemed well with another poem I just read.
    K-The lost will do their best to get home, if they are loved. To our soldiers who have given what they had.
  • pinonpinon Posts: 427
    it´s beautiful, Pacifer :) ...profound....
    Life is too serious to be taken seriously
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    I really enjoyed this one alot...very nurturing and motherly...you will never loose that guarding and unconditional love feeling of your kids, no matter how old they get... :)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    thanks all for the nice comments
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    pacifier wrote:
    thanks all for the nice comments

    You deserve them!!! Such a lovely poem, 'lil momma! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • jboelhowjboelhow Posts: 170
    Complex poem. The relationship of our real life and our imagined life growing together is unique. A sad tone correlated with the reality that the two don't mesh to create a complete life...
    Live the life you dream

    "Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
    So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    jboelhow wrote:
    Complex poem. The relationship of our real life and our imagined life growing together is unique. A sad tone correlated with the reality that the two don't mesh to create a complete life...

    I'm glad you see it that way. I left the wording open to interpretation so that it could seem as though it was about the one life, the one person, and so that everyone could have there own view of what the poem was about, but really, in writing it, it is about me being pregnant. I'm only nine weeks pregnant and have no real signs of being pregnant yet, so it all feels pretend at the moment and the only way I can make it feel real is by imagination.
  • jboelhowjboelhow Posts: 170
    pacifier wrote:
    I'm glad you see it that way. I left the wording open to interpretation so that it could seem as though it was about the one life, the one person, and so that everyone could have there own view of what the poem was about, but really, in writing it, it is about me being pregnant. I'm only nine weeks pregnant and have no real signs of being pregnant yet, so it all feels pretend at the moment and the only way I can make it feel real is by imagination.

    I thought it was about being pregnant, until the last two lines. As a father of three children I'll tell you what you imagine the child to be will not be what reality. It will be so much more, more joyful, more awe inspiring, but also more heartbreaking at times. Not to sound negative, just truthful. Children reveal such a raw experience to this world, both the positive and negative. It sounds clichéish, but having children is a life changing experience, am I am happy I to be a Dad!
    Live the life you dream

    "Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
    So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
  • sistanumsysistanumsy Posts: 218
    Congradulations. Take care of you.:)
    K-The lost will do their best to get home, if they are loved. To our soldiers who have given what they had.
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    jboelhow wrote:
    I thought it was about being pregnant, until the last two lines. As a father of three children I'll tell you what you imagine the child to be will not be what reality. It will be so much more, more joyful, more awe inspiring, but also more heartbreaking at times. Not to sound negative, just truthful. Children reveal such a raw experience to this world, both the positive and negative. It sounds clichéish, but having children is a life changing experience, am I am happy I to be a Dad!


    I know that I am in for something scary and something wonderful. I am not so much imagining what the child will be like, but I just have to use my imagination to believe that there is even a child growing inside of me. It still doesn't feel real. I am extrememly happy, but also more scared then I can say because for all of their life I will worry about them. I just hope that I can raise my children well to be a good people who make good choices for themselves and care about the people around them. And I hope beyond hope that I can protect them from evil, such as sexual predators. I think that sort of thing scares me the most.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    pacifier wrote:
    life within a life, unknown, unseen
    imagination is sometimes the only reality
    I couldn't know if I didn't dream
    of this life that's now existing
    a life within a life takes form, takes shape
    the only thing that I didn't make
    I ask this life to take and take
    and I will love for lovings sake
    this life within a life, from birth to death
    and when it seems like nothing's left
    I'll give to it my dying breath
    this thought in which my dreams are kept

    This poem could be about solitariness - distinct from solitude - which is a condition of solipsism. However, rather than seeing apartness - this living-in-one's-head - as an illness, the poem's speaker is quite defiant to defend the individual cloister of creativity, of spirit, against the world. I like that statement!
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    And a poem is enriched by its potential for interpretations the author didn't know. :)
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    And a poem is enriched by its potential for interpretations the author didn't know. :)

    thanks. i like your interpretation. interesting.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Yep, It just jumped out at me. Usually on The Porch, if there's a thread going, namely, "Does anyone know who wrote such and such a song?", it's important to read the thread in its entirety before replying, so you don't repeat yourself or come across as as inconsiderate. But with a poetry thread, sometimes it pays to read a poem afresh before being led by others' interpretations! :D


    Cheers. :)
  • sistanumsysistanumsy Posts: 218
    pacifier wrote:
    I know that I am in for something scary and something wonderful. I am not so much imagining what the child will be like, but I just have to use my imagination to believe that there is even a child growing inside of me. It still doesn't feel real. I am extrememly happy, but also more scared then I can say because for all of their life I will worry about them. I just hope that I can raise my children well to be a good people who make good choices for themselves and care about the people around them. And I hope beyond hope that I can protect them from evil, such as sexual predators. I think that sort of thing scares me the most.

    1st plenty a' loven,think a name,the rest will come.
    K-The lost will do their best to get home, if they are loved. To our soldiers who have given what they had.
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    pacifier wrote:
    I know that I am in for something scary and something wonderful. I am not so much imagining what the child will be like, but I just have to use my imagination to believe that there is even a child growing inside of me. It still doesn't feel real. I am extrememly happy, but also more scared then I can say because for all of their life I will worry about them. I just hope that I can raise my children well to be a good people who make good choices for themselves and care about the people around them. And I hope beyond hope that I can protect them from evil, such as sexual predators. I think that sort of thing scares me the most.


    I think you will be a good mom. I felt the same way. I was worried, I still do. I think it's probably natural. You care and you want the best for your baby.
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    sistanumsy wrote:
    1st plenty a' loven,think a name,the rest will come.

    Well I'm trying to do the plenty of loving but it's a little bit weird when I can't even believe I have a living baby growing inside of me :) But I know that I am feeling love because I am actually looking after myself (which I don't normally do, but now I have a very big reason to because it is not just myself I am caring for) and also the fear I feel is a kind of love, the fear for my baby's future, even the crazy fear of what I would do and how I would try to protect the baby if someone attacked me while walking down the street. And the happiness I feel when I look at my fiance and realise that we have a family now and we are going to have a child that is part of both of us.

    The name part - we have three girls names that we both really like and will pick from if the baby is a girl, but we can't agree on any boys names.

    The rest will come, it's just scary waiting.
  • decides2dreamdecides2dream Posts: 14,977
    pacifier wrote:
    life within a life, unknown, unseen
    imagination is sometimes the only reality
    I couldn't know if I didn't dream
    of this life that's now existing
    a life within a life takes form, takes shape
    the only thing that I didn't make
    I ask this life to take and take
    and I will love for lovings sake
    this life within a life, from birth to death
    and when it seems like nothing's left
    I'll give to it my dying breath
    this thought in which my dreams are kept



    well done!
    i especially enjoy the lines i bolded, great imagery. :)
    beautiful, and i really feel it.
    Stay with me...
    Let's just breathe...


    I am myself like you somehow


  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    No need to imagine anymore! she is finally here.

    http://www.flickr.com/photos/45215389@N00/

    It was weird, I was worried about becoming a parent and not knowing what to do all through the whole pregnancy, right up until the final push, but once they placed her on my chest all of the fear left and it just kicked in that I was a parent! It's the best feeling in the world.
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,412
    pacifier wrote:
    No need to imagine anymore! she is finally here.

    http://www.flickr.com/photos/45215389@N00/

    It was weird, I was worried about becoming a parent and not knowing what to do all through the whole pregnancy, right up until the final push, but once they placed her on my chest all of the fear left and it just kicked in that I was a parent! It's the best feeling in the world.

    What a nice face she has!! :)

    Congratulations!!
    &&&&&&&&&&&&&&
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    pacifier wrote:
    No need to imagine anymore! she is finally here.

    http://www.flickr.com/photos/45215389@N00/

    It was weird, I was worried about becoming a parent and not knowing what to do all through the whole pregnancy, right up until the final push, but once they placed her on my chest all of the fear left and it just kicked in that I was a parent! It's the best feeling in the world.


    Awwwhhh! How beautiful, thanx for sharing the pics! There is nothing in the world like being a "mama"! The scariest and most rewarding job you will ever have. Happily I think my lil' boy will be out and about early, around mid December. I am so excited! Best of luck and many blessings to you! :):)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • deadnotedeadnote Posts: 1,678
    awesome poem
    set your laughter free

    dreamer in my dream

    we got the guns

    i love you,but im..............callin out.........callin out
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    pacifier wrote:
    No need to imagine anymore! she is finally here.

    http://www.flickr.com/photos/45215389@N00/

    It was weird, I was worried about becoming a parent and not knowing what to do all through the whole pregnancy, right up until the final push, but once they placed her on my chest all of the fear left and it just kicked in that I was a parent! It's the best feeling in the world.


    Congradulations!!

    So glad you decided to share with us...very cute :) and it is great to hear from you as to.

    Best wishes to you all!!
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    thank you all :) being a mum is great but time consuming. I will have to try post something new here one of these days
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    an up date. don't worry, this will be the last time. Next time i post it will be a poem, i swear.....

    http://www.flickr.com/photos/45215389@N00/
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    pacifier wrote:
    an up date. don't worry, this will be the last time. Next time i post it will be a poem, i swear.....

    http://www.flickr.com/photos/45215389@N00/


    Awwhhh! How cute! Thanks for sharing the pics proud mama! They are adorable.

    My lil' boy tried to get out this past Sunday while we were in Michigan. He slowed down a bit though and decided he wasn't ready to venture out. This one is dragging labor out but could come any time now. Even though I am not due until the end of Dec. all looks fine for an early delivery. I will let you guys know when he decides he is ready for the world. :):)

    Thanks for sharing those pics Pacifier, I love em'!

    Sorry for posting on your thread depop!
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • deadnotedeadnote Posts: 1,678
    nice poem
    set your laughter free

    dreamer in my dream

    we got the guns

    i love you,but im..............callin out.........callin out
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    deadnote wrote:
    nice poem

    Thanks. I'm surprised people are still comenting on the poem after all this time. It's much appreciated, doubley so since you have said so twice now :)
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