life

pacifier

life within a life, unknown, unseen
imagination is sometimes the only reality
I couldn't know if I didn't dream
of this life that's now existing
a life within a life takes form, takes shape
the only thing that I didn't make
I ask this life to take and take
and I will love for lovings sake
this life within a life, from birth to death
and when it seems like nothing's left
I'll give to it my dying breath
this thought in which my dreams are kept

depopulationINC

I really like this MzP

Great to see you post one

pacifier

depopulationINC wrote:

I really like this MzP

Great to see you post one

Thanks, it's been a while, I know. That's why I really felt like writing something today. sometimes it's good to know that your mind is still working

sistanumsy

Good one. It seemed well with another poem I just read.

pinon

it´s beautiful, Pacifer ...profound....

twin1

I really enjoyed this one alot...very nurturing and motherly...you will never loose that guarding and unconditional love feeling of your kids, no matter how old they get...

pacifier

thanks all for the nice comments

Being Enlightened

pacifier wrote:

thanks all for the nice comments

You deserve them!!! Such a lovely poem, 'lil momma!

jboelhow

Complex poem. The relationship of our real life and our imagined life growing together is unique. A sad tone correlated with the reality that the two don't mesh to create a complete life...

pacifier

jboelhow wrote:

Complex poem. The relationship of our real life and our imagined life growing together is unique. A sad tone correlated with the reality that the two don't mesh to create a complete life...

I'm glad you see it that way. I left the wording open to interpretation so that it could seem as though it was about the one life, the one person, and so that everyone could have there own view of what the poem was about, but really, in writing it, it is about me being pregnant. I'm only nine weeks pregnant and have no real signs of being pregnant yet, so it all feels pretend at the moment and the only way I can make it feel real is by imagination.

jboelhow

pacifier wrote:

I'm glad you see it that way. I left the wording open to interpretation so that it could seem as though it was about the one life, the one person, and so that everyone could have there own view of what the poem was about, but really, in writing it, it is about me being pregnant. I'm only nine weeks pregnant and have no real signs of being pregnant yet, so it all feels pretend at the moment and the only way I can make it feel real is by imagination.

I thought it was about being pregnant, until the last two lines. As a father of three children I'll tell you what you imagine the child to be will not be what reality. It will be so much more, more joyful, more awe inspiring, but also more heartbreaking at times. Not to sound negative, just truthful. Children reveal such a raw experience to this world, both the positive and negative. It sounds clichéish, but having children is a life changing experience, am I am happy I to be a Dad!

sistanumsy

Congradulations. Take care of you.:)

pacifier

jboelhow wrote:

I thought it was about being pregnant, until the last two lines. As a father of three children I'll tell you what you imagine the child to be will not be what reality. It will be so much more, more joyful, more awe inspiring, but also more heartbreaking at times. Not to sound negative, just truthful. Children reveal such a raw experience to this world, both the positive and negative. It sounds clichéish, but having children is a life changing experience, am I am happy I to be a Dad!

I know that I am in for something scary and something wonderful. I am not so much imagining what the child will be like, but I just have to use my imagination to believe that there is even a child growing inside of me. It still doesn't feel real. I am extrememly happy, but also more scared then I can say because for all of their life I will worry about them. I just hope that I can raise my children well to be a good people who make good choices for themselves and care about the people around them. And I hope beyond hope that I can protect them from evil, such as sexual predators. I think that sort of thing scares me the most.

FinsburyParkCarrots

pacifier wrote:

life within a life, unknown, unseen
imagination is sometimes the only reality
I couldn't know if I didn't dream
of this life that's now existing
a life within a life takes form, takes shape
the only thing that I didn't make
I ask this life to take and take
and I will love for lovings sake
this life within a life, from birth to death
and when it seems like nothing's left
I'll give to it my dying breath
this thought in which my dreams are kept

This poem could be about solitariness - distinct from solitude - which is a condition of solipsism. However, rather than seeing apartness - this living-in-one's-head - as an illness, the poem's speaker is quite defiant to defend the individual cloister of creativity, of spirit, against the world. I like that statement!

FinsburyParkCarrots

And a poem is enriched by its potential for interpretations the author didn't know.

pacifier

FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:

And a poem is enriched by its potential for interpretations the author didn't know.

thanks. i like your interpretation. interesting.

FinsburyParkCarrots

Yep, It just jumped out at me. Usually on The Porch, if there's a thread going, namely, "Does anyone know who wrote such and such a song?", it's important to read the thread in its entirety before replying, so you don't repeat yourself or come across as as inconsiderate. But with a poetry thread, sometimes it pays to read a poem afresh before being led by others' interpretations!


Cheers.

sistanumsy

pacifier wrote:

I know that I am in for something scary and something wonderful. I am not so much imagining what the child will be like, but I just have to use my imagination to believe that there is even a child growing inside of me. It still doesn't feel real. I am extrememly happy, but also more scared then I can say because for all of their life I will worry about them. I just hope that I can raise my children well to be a good people who make good choices for themselves and care about the people around them. And I hope beyond hope that I can protect them from evil, such as sexual predators. I think that sort of thing scares me the most.

1st plenty a' loven,think a name,the rest will come.

twin2

pacifier wrote:

I know that I am in for something scary and something wonderful. I am not so much imagining what the child will be like, but I just have to use my imagination to believe that there is even a child growing inside of me. It still doesn't feel real. I am extrememly happy, but also more scared then I can say because for all of their life I will worry about them. I just hope that I can raise my children well to be a good people who make good choices for themselves and care about the people around them. And I hope beyond hope that I can protect them from evil, such as sexual predators. I think that sort of thing scares me the most.

I think you will be a good mom. I felt the same way. I was worried, I still do. I think it's probably natural. You care and you want the best for your baby.

pacifier

sistanumsy wrote:

1st plenty a' loven,think a name,the rest will come.

Well I'm trying to do the plenty of loving but it's a little bit weird when I can't even believe I have a living baby growing inside of me But I know that I am feeling love because I am actually looking after myself (which I don't normally do, but now I have a very big reason to because it is not just myself I am caring for) and also the fear I feel is a kind of love, the fear for my baby's future, even the crazy fear of what I would do and how I would try to protect the baby if someone attacked me while walking down the street. And the happiness I feel when I look at my fiance and realise that we have a family now and we are going to have a child that is part of both of us.

The name part - we have three girls names that we both really like and will pick from if the baby is a girl, but we can't agree on any boys names.

The rest will come, it's just scary waiting.

decides2dream

pacifier wrote:

life within a life, unknown, unseen
imagination is sometimes the only reality
I couldn't know if I didn't dream
of this life that's now existing
a life within a life takes form, takes shape
the only thing that I didn't make
I ask this life to take and take
and I will love for lovings sake
this life within a life, from birth to death
and when it seems like nothing's left
I'll give to it my dying breath
this thought in which my dreams are kept

well done!
i especially enjoy the lines i bolded, great imagery.
beautiful, and i really feel it.