out of luck

pacifier
pacifier Posts: 1,009
edited January 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
heard you call an angel the devil when they wouldn't help you self destruct
heard you begging god for his help then tellin him to go get fucked

you're outta luck

there's only so long we can hold our hands out
why can't you see this is not a hand out
it's just a way out
of a situation
you fight to stay in

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  • gue_barium
    gue_barium Posts: 5,515
    nice, intense.
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  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    thanks. it came into my head and i wanted to write it down before i forgot (the last year or so I have not been writing things down so they just disappear back from where they came). Anyway, I interupted the flow of things so nothing else came to me after that, so it's not finished, but maybe I'll get around to it someday.

    anyone else want to attempt an ending for me?
  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    i like it just the way it is. :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    catefrances wrote:
    i like it just the way it is. :)

    Thanks, maybe I'll leave it then.

    I like getting feed back. it seems these days less people are replying to other people's poems on here. I can't talk though, I'm as guilty as the next one. never seem to have time anymore.
  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    pacifier wrote:
    Thanks, maybe I'll leave it then.

    I like getting feed back. it seems these days less people are replying to other people's poems on here. I can't talk though, I'm as guilty as the next one. never seem to have time anymore.


    i'd rather have more people read my stuff than comment on it. it makes no difference to me. though it's all about getting it out of my head onto the page. therapy through writing. :D
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    catefrances wrote:
    i'd rather have more people read my stuff than comment on it. it makes no difference to me. though it's all about getting it out of my head onto the page. therapy through writing. :D

    true. I feel that too, otherwise I wouldn't bother writing it down, but at the same time I wonder what other people think, I must wonder, and you too, or we wouldn't post it in such a public place where people feel free to judge it and comment on it. And when I see how many people read what i write yet leave no comment I wonder if they read it because it interested them or if they didn't leave a comment because it meant nothing to them. Did I just waste a few precious moments of their lives by having them read it? OBviously that is a little melodramatic :), but I wonder.
  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    pacifier wrote:
    Thanks, maybe I'll leave it then.


    indeed...i like it as is
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    depopulationINC wrote:
    indeed...i like it as is

    then that settles it, it stays as it is

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