Never Fly When The Gods Are Fighting

TheA

Hi.

This one is called: "Never Fly When The Gods Are Fighting", and behind all of the mythology the meaning is simple... But I don't want to spoil it, so perhaps in a few days, if you'll want, i'll post it.

Here it is:

Never fly when the gods are fighting
Forever keep on mute
They have battles up in heaven
While you ly helpless on the ground

Never hold ambrosia cup for Atlas
Mighty Hades will want it too
They will wear you out, my brother
Stay in Sparta and save yourself

Stay on earth and head for cover
Achilles wants to fight Apollo once more
Don't hold the spear of heroes for him
You can die or lose yourself

Never help heroes when they call you
Remember to think before you act
When there are heroes, someone messed up
And Zeus's lightnings don't forgive

Olympus is not for you, fare mortal
The earth, remember, is not that small
Don't listen to them, calling
Never speak when gods are fighting

Winds of Greece whistle "Answer, Ares…"
Ares changed his name to Mars
Jupiter, Minerva and Venus rule the sky now
But like with Zeus, shut your mouth

Set sail my brother, my friend
Get away from Hercules while you can
Olympus, once again, is burning hate
You can burn your wings if you won't go

Cheers

TheA

No one? Do I suck that much??? :(

Cheers

FinsburyParkCarrots

".. As flies to wanton boys are we to the gods; they kill us for their sport..." ("King Lear")

This is the first time I've seen your poem. I enjoyed it. Thank you.

EvilToasterElf

I like it, there seems to be a rythm almost subconsciously to the poem, because I haven't been able to pick up exactly what it is. I like the juxtaposition of the old gods with a modern narrative style, the only problem I see with this, is the repitition of the phrase "fair mortal" because it has an old-timey feel to it, but the rest of the poem simply mentions historical and mythological references in a modern voice, good read, I look forward to see if the explanation matches what I've gleamed from it.

TheA

Hi.

First of all, I just want to say that my explenation equels to yours. After all, it's a poem and we all have our meanings. It's perfectly fine by me if you don't agree with my interpentation.

Ok, here goes:

Over my own life I got into situations when two or more friends of mine got into a fight and I just didn't know what to do... So I stayed silent for I won't hurt neither.

However, friends are not gods. There was another case - At a board I am a member there was a fight between two very strong (status, influence, brain) people, both kinda my friends, and I wanted to say what I wanted, but I never did, as if I had said anything I would get in trouble (I'd lose nutrality status, which is bad enough). They are the gods, the powerful people, those who I am small next to, at that board.
That's my meaning.

Cheers

EvilToasterElf

Interesting, I wouldn't have associated the mythological figures for actual people but simply forces beyond your control. It was a good read, keep it up, but don't stop with this one either, you can definately keep crafting it and improving it. Bring this thread back when you update it and see how the changes go.