I quickly wrote this down....

fitzy
fitzy Posts: 20
edited March 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I had an idea, so I tried it... i don't know if I'm meant to rework it, or just leave it as is... but here it is anyway :) I'm starting to get a bit more regular at writing (more than once a year)... even though I never thought I had anything useful in my brain.. do I?
she breaks back to reality
the slightest tingle
human skin providing so much sensation
enough to feel this

how had this made it so far
surging ahead over each obstacle
only noticed so close to the end
so close to the ground

seeking its way over her ankle
losing direction and meaning
seemed like forever
how long has passed since streaking across her thigh

she remembers glancing down
as it tumbled over her belly
making its way down to her inner thigh
a quick shiver

how could he do it
using her mind to control her
the body a canvas for his misery
another waiting on her left breast

she noticed as it fell from her chin to land there
remembered wondering whether it would make the journey
over her naked body to the cold tiles
a quick refuge from the pain within

but that was where it always started
the usual dash to the bathroom
sneaking a quick self portrait
her mascara beginning to run
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  • coleen
    coleen Posts: 938
    for what it's worth, my vote is yes - but in the end it's what you think that counts.

    write if you feel the urge to write. sing, dance, paint, play, smile, cry, shout, laugh....:D
  • fitzy
    fitzy Posts: 20
    It's worth plenty :)
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    I hope this is worth it too.....yes!!!!!! it's great.....keep it up fitzy
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • fitzy
    fitzy Posts: 20
    wow :) thanks!!!

    ps. i'm assembling a website for all my creativity, so I can find it :) I'll keep you posted!
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    hey....post a link....quality is always interesting.....hey.....that's what I think.......:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    it made me think of a snake....biblical or not....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • fitzy
    fitzy Posts: 20
    quality :) such praise!! I might get a big head ;)

    interesting snake theory! It's amazing what other people see... well it amazes me!
  • fitzy
    fitzy Posts: 20
    ISN wrote:
    hey....post a link....quality is always interesting.....hey.....that's what I think.......:)

    Just finished setting up!!

    http://www.bootsiscat.com
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    good job.....I'll czech that out 2moro.....pretty puffed right now....sleep anon......if it's any good, I'll bump it to death :)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • fitzy
    fitzy Posts: 20
    ISN wrote:
    good job.....I'll czech that out 2moro.....pretty puffed right now....sleep anon......if it's any good, I'll bump it to death :)

    Did you have a look? :)
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    2moro and 2moro and 2moro
    added up 2 a whole heap of yesterdays....
    but finally I looked....
    and I gotta say it's gorgeous.....
    very good taste (that would be an insult to some)
    but I think it's great......
    the colours.....teh kitty.....
    and I haven't gotten thru it all, but I am bookmarking it......
    it's VERY gorgeous!!!!!!
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • fitzy
    fitzy Posts: 20
    ISN wrote:
    2moro and 2moro and 2moro
    added up 2 a whole heap of yesterdays....
    but finally I looked....
    and I gotta say it's gorgeous.....
    very good taste (that would be an insult to some)
    but I think it's great......
    the colours.....teh kitty.....
    and I haven't gotten thru it all, but I am bookmarking it......
    it's VERY gorgeous!!!!!!

    awww thanks :) Well I'm trying to keep it topped up to please the masses ;)
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    congrats....ace site....I want more people to check it out.....I wish I knew how to do something like that.....but I'm too lazy (sheepish grin)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......

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