Conditioned Foe

NothingbetterNothingbetter Posts: 570
Here's my latest piece...hope you like it.

Conditioned Foe

This gluttonous world devours me whole,
My stomach is empty,
But my mind is full,
Of the raging thoughts that consume my soul,
The darkness is relentless,
Draining me…
Taking it’s toll.

The light is blinding,
I can’t turn away,
Spotted vision,
Damaging sun rays..
You left me for dead,
I’m all alone,
What I thought was a friend,
Blossomed into a foe.

Out of my life,
You take out your blade,
And mark my headstone,
With the year of your maim.
Take your piece,
And be on your way,
An illusion of my memory,
Another heart slain.
Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    my favourite line is the first line....I've seldom come across such a vivid image of life eating us.....alive......we're sacrificial victims......oh, glory, how do we survive?
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • wow, those first couple lines really caught my attention. i liked the poem quite a bit. it flows extremely well and your language is fantastic
    "be a philosopher but, amid all your philosophy, be first a man" - david hume

    Mitch Hedberg- RIP 1968-2005. your jokes have laughed me through a lot. I thank you.
  • Thank you! I appreciate the feedback, and yes, we are the victims of the world's insatiable appetite.
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
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