Opaque

NothingbetterNothingbetter Posts: 570
edited August 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Innocence is oblivious to the face of reality..
Shredded in contempt,
Of this judicious process that tears us apart.
Taking the stand for a cause with a trap door,
Fading into the pit of morbid curiosity,
Unable to decide what to do with the next breath,
Overriding our minds,
Taking control of shortcomings,
Only to split them into smaller pieces,
Of that which makes us perfect..
Reaching for nothing,
Wanting for everything,
Taking a bite of pleasure,
Out of a tasteless ingredient,
That will only distort our hearts.
Longing for a white room,
Colored in rich nothingness,
Sitting in silence,
As the roar of life causes deafness,
To one that could never hear.
Blind simplicity,
Rids us of the complicated greed,
That is imbedded in our cortex…
Embodied by nature’s inner core,
Which offers too much to bare,
Falling into this volcano,
A soul free of despair.
Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I think the first line says it all. Great. Very complex...:)






    :)


    ali:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    I like your use of the present continuous.....which gives the poem authority
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Thank you for the nice remarks :)

    ISN, yes, it's going on as we speak. One of the few poems I've written about the here and now...rather than the past. This is the first poem I've just written as a stream of consciousness....rather than putting it together.
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    well, then, I recommend that you do that in future (it always works for me).....it's a very good peom......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • I'll take that advice and run with it, thanks :)
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
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