Misty Eyed Statue

NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
edited August 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I can't remember if I ever posted this one. It's more along the lines of lyrics, rather than poetry.

Misty Eyed Statue

I’ve lived a thousand lives,
and I’m full of lost souls,
Reaching out to be saved by someone,
Reaching out for no one,
I’ve come undone in this life,
Looking up at the misty eyed statue,
Telling me I’m destined to be left behind.

Misty Eyed Statue
Misty Eyed Statue

This old building of ruins,
Suits me just fine,
I’ve lived here forever,
no visitors stop by,
Seeing the crumbling exterior,
No one stops in to take a look,
Missing out on the stained glass windows,
And all that within.

Misty Eyed Statue
Misty Eyed Statue

Looking down at me with misty eyes,
And pity not of this world,
The chance has passed and I miss the skies,
Tears flow down,
And the answer can’t be circled.

Misty Eyed Statue
Misty Eyed Statue

On a mission that’s been aborted,
I disappear from pictures past,
And realize I was never here at all,
I was never me at last.
Windows close and doors lock,
And chances pass along,
No ability to make progress,
Hands without a clock.
Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
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Comments

  • Have you set it to music yet or aren't you a composer?

    I'm thinking of doing it mysef for myself with your permission.

    You really remind me of Eddie. Especially your metaphors. Is he your greatest teacher?
    Consciousness is Power
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    No, I haven't set it to music yet. I haven't been musically trained, although recently I have been learning more through lessons and studying a bit on my own. I'm still learning guitar.

    Lyrics, and poetry, just pop into my head at times. They don't have any particular tune to them, really.

    Thank you for the ENORMOUS compliment of me reminding you of Eddie. That is the ultimate compliment to me. Eddie is the ultimate influence on me, but Layne Staley would also be up there. I'm really big on metaphors. I love them. I have never been one to right direct thoughts.

    As for you putting music with it, that wouldn't offend me, so long as you didn't "steal" the lyrics and make a profit. Obviously this isn't copyrighted, but if you did it just for you....I would be flattered and I'd like to hear what you come up with :)
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
  • I just want you to know I was serious about the Eddie comment.

    Also, I believe the artist owns the copyright at the time the material was created.[b/] You should mail unopened copies of your work to yourself and save them for the postmark date. Cheap and easy copyright insurance. It cost about $10 last time I got a form. You could probably find them on the internet.

    Indelible Love

    Marked for life by exact device
    An artist so loving
    Their passion controls the brush
    Canvas is ripped
    Devoured by a moment of truth
    He cries out but not in pain
    Indelible love can't be driven from out minds

    A constant reminder
    So perfectly placed
    Undeniable bold remarks

    I've got mine I see you've got yours
    Oh won't you help
    I've never done this before
    A precious gift so patiently wrapped
    It will be treasured forever and a day

    So willing to give
    So hard to recieve
    Priceless are you sure it's for me

    Just accept it
    Don't question the fact
    Next time you'll see it engraved with your name
    Consciousness is Power
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    I just want you to know I was serious about the Eddie comment.

    Also, I believe the artist owns the copyright at the time the material was created.[b/] You should mail unopened copies of your work to yourself and save them for the postmark date. Cheap and easy copyright insurance. It cost about $10 last time I got a form. You could probably find them on the internet.

    Indelible Love

    Marked for life by exact device
    An artist so loving
    Their passion controls the brush
    Canvas is ripped
    Devoured by a moment of truth
    He cries out but not in pain
    Indelible love can't be driven from out minds

    A constant reminder
    So perfectly placed
    Undeniable bold remarks

    I've got mine I see you've got yours
    Oh won't you help
    I've never done this before
    A precious gift so patiently wrapped
    It will be treasured forever and a day

    So willing to give
    So hard to recieve
    Priceless are you sure it's for me

    Just accept it
    Don't question the fact
    Next time you'll see it engraved with your name

    I took it as as serious compliment. Again, I see that as the ultimate compliment you could have possibly given me. It made my day, in all seriousness.

    Thanks for the information on the copyright. I'll remember that.

    Your poem is very cool...I love this particular part especially:

    "Canvas is ripped
    Devoured by a moment of truth"

    The carnivorous idea of it being devoured really punctuates the point...the ferocity. Just awesome.
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
  • Thanks. What is there to say after that?

    I like your words better than mine. Can't wait to see more of your work.

    I have other songs but sometimes the lyrics sound lame without the music.


    p.s. I read what you said and it could have gone either way without the voice.
    Consciousness is Power
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    I will post more of my work. I posted some of it several months ago and not many responses were made.

    Well, my lyrics might not mean much considering there isn't any music to go with them. I need a Stone Gossard to riff it out :)
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    i think i've read most of your posts, not always in a replying mood...but you're very very good. i especially like this one.
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    Thanks, vr! That means a lot. I've never taken it personally, just mentioning to him since he's newer.
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    this reminds me of this chorus

    I find it kind of funny
    I find it kind of sad
    the dreams in which I'm dying
    are the best I've ever had...etc.....

    after reading your song, that just popped into my head, tried to get the whole lyrics but couldn't find them....hehehehehe.....hopeless....heheheheh
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    ISN wrote:
    this reminds me of this chorus

    I find it kind of funny
    I find it kind of sad
    the dreams in which I'm dying
    are the best I've ever had...etc.....

    after reading your song, that just popped into my head, tried to get the whole lyrics but couldn't find them....hehehehehe.....hopeless....heheheheh

    Sounds like an interesting song :)
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    if anyone can educate nothingbetter about this song.......I'd be very happy :)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    ISN wrote:
    if anyone can educate nothingbetter about this song.......I'd be very happy :)

    As would I. I'm always open to education :D
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
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