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NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
edited April 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I see you lying there, on life support, and I can't help but feel sorry for you. After all we've been through, no one has had a bigger impact on my life. You changed me for the worse...you changed me for the better...but the most important thing is: you changed me.

My heart reaches out to you, now more than ever. You were there for me when I was down....you were the for me when it hurt to breathe....you were there for me in moments of rage...but the most important thing is: you were there for me.

You caused me so much pain. You ruined my innocence. You ruined all that I was, and all that I thought I could be. How could you do such a thing? You ruined what I used to be....but the most important thing is: you ruined me.

During a time when I felt I could not go on...during a time when I felt that life was no longer worth living...you helped me feel anger. You helped me feel pain. You helped me feel sorrow...but the most important thing is: you helped me feel.

You lie there..fading. You lie there waiting. But we both know you can't die. You can't. You will always be around. You will always be a part of this life. Most people don't know you...most people will never know you....but the most important thing is: you are me.
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Oooo, I liked this a lot and the twist at the end really caught me off guard!! :) I kept thinking it was pretty neat how each paragraph ended with "but the most important thing is:", especially since the content was so morose, but once I got to the end and was hit with: "you are me", it all came together. Good job, Nothingbetter!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    I feel like I just saw the "Sixth Sense" again!!! Very well written and I agree with BE, the ending left me breathless :)
    Adolescence in essence is all about trust.
    Leaving is for the answering machine.
  • karma defectkarma defect Posts: 5,483
    Thanks for letting me read this. good job
    « One man's glory is another man's hell.
    You’re on the outside, never bound by such a spell.
    Together in the darkness, alone in the light.
    I took it upon me to be yours, Timmy,
    I’ll lead your angels and demons at play tonight......»
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    Thank you, all. I appreciate the kind words. Glad you liked it.
    Kansas City 6/12/03 ** Kissimmee 10/9/04 ** Atlantic City 10/1/05 ** Denver 7/2/06 ** Denver 7/3/06 ** Chicago 8/23/09 ** Chicago 8/24/09 ** Kansas City 5/3/10 ** Dallas 11/15/13 ** Oklahoma City 11/16/13 ** St. Louis 10/3/14 ** Tulsa 10/8/14 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/20/16 ** Chicago - Wrigley Field 8/22/16 ** Oklahoma City 9/20/22 ** Ft. Worth 9/15/23

    EV - St. Louis 7/1/11 ** Tulsa 11/19/12
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