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My first ever Poem

twisztadtwisztad Posts: 49
edited May 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
This I wrote when I was like 14 or 16, to my first great love, well its short but what do you expect from a dumb love struck teenager, I hope I can still remember it, Let me know what you think...


Everymorning when I wake, I awake to the thought of you.
Everyday While I breath, I think of nothing but you.
Every evening before I sleep, I thank God for meeting you.
And Everynight while I sleep I dream of nothing but you, and I would'nt want it anyother way, Because I just want to be close to you...

And dont be to brutal...


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Sorry just recalled this is how it went.



Everyday before I sleep, I sleep thinking of you.
Everynight while I dream, I dream of nothing but you.
Everymorning when I wake, I wake to the thought of you.
And there is nothing that I want more,
than to always be close to you.
Even though I know I am, I still cast no shadow.

"We'd rather challenge our fans and make them listen to our songs than give them something that's easy to digest. There is a lot of music out there that is very easy to digest but we never wanted to be part of it."
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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    Wordsworth called poetry "The spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings." If that's what poetry is, then you achieved it first time round. Thanks for sharing it.

    :)
  • twisztadtwisztad Posts: 49
    I appreciate your feedback
    FinsburyParkCarrots, Now if others would just follow your example..


    Thanks lol
    Even though I know I am, I still cast no shadow.

    "We'd rather challenge our fans and make them listen to our songs than give them something that's easy to digest. There is a lot of music out there that is very easy to digest but we never wanted to be part of it."
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