Blank Sheet

CodeRiotCodeRiot Posts: 115
edited September 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
you had an opinion
you had a thought
you had a voice inside
and now it's gone

you had an itching
to be a star
you had the pitfalls
and all that you are

you made yourself perfect
you made me sad
it's been so damn long
you were all I had

I once dreamt of you sitting back
holding your guitar
you really were the king of that...

you were perfect
now we're not
you were the king
now we're pawns

one by one we fall
you fell first
Drifting off to hell
like a piece of dirt

you had your opinions
you had your thoughts
you had such a voice
but now it's gone...
I tried to be a better me
In the end I looked like the rest of them.
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  • KovoKovo Posts: 255
    "one by one we fall
    you fell first" I really like that line, dunno why but it stood out.
    I shouldn't have to fight a battle I'll never win, just to lose those I've never had.
  • "you made yourself perfect
    you made me sad"

    I like that line especially
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Good poem. Very sad though.
  • is this about anyone imparticular?
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • is this about anyone imparticular?




    It's amazing how deeply you can feel for someone you never even knew.
    I tried to be a better me
    In the end I looked like the rest of them.
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I like the line aboout the guitar....classy:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    you made yourself perfect
    you made me sad
    it's been so damn long
    you were all I had

    sense of loss.....my favourite verse
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Very cool, nice flow, and gentle.
    7/10/06
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