please come home

Collin

This is the first time I post here, I'm not really a poet, a writer or anything... But a friend of mine has a band and his english isn't that well, mine isn't either but it's better than his. Anyway I write lyrics for him, usually there kind of meaningless, you may think this one is cheap and un-original, but I never felt this way before about somebody and I feel that this text really shows how I feel,well for me at least... Hope you don't hate it.


The days are getting longer,
and times are much harder,
everyday I miss you,
everyday I cry.

I love you, darling,
please come home.

It might take me a minute,
or maybe an hour,
I’ll change eventually.
If you could give me,
just one more chance,
I promise you baby,
I won’t let you down
I’ll be there for you,
every time around.

I love you, darling,
won’t you come home.
I love you darling,
won’t you love me too.

It’s been so hard,
living without you.
I’m sorry I hurt you,
I’m sorry I made you cry.
I know everything I say,
sound meaningless,
But please, darling,
know I love you,
and can’t live without you.

I love you, darling,
please come home,
I need you, darling,
please love me again.

So this is all I can say,
I hope you know that I love you,
I hope you know that I care,
don’t leave me standing,
don’t go away,
I love you, darling
I love you.

FinsburyParkCarrots

What kind of feel has the music for this lyric? Balladic? Rocky?

Just interested to know.

Mr Pyjama

Great touching piece, you're emotion really comes accross in you're writing. Well done, good start.

ruby

Yes, your emotion definitely comes through...I liked that very much.

Collin

Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
What kind of feel has the music for this lyric? Balladic? Rocky?

Just interested to know.

I wrote it to be a Bob Dylan kind of song you know like Not dark yet or standing in the doorway (listening to time out of mind right now). But he plays ? rock ? I don't know blink 182 music... Sometimes he write really beautiful music to go with my lyrics, haven't heard everything yet, he'll bring out a demo-cd soon so...

A HitchHiker Poet

Sad poem. but sad is good