slam thread

jboelhowjboelhow Posts: 170
edited September 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
OK, I've been reading some good stuff here lets see what we can do off the top of our heads. Create a slam poem, right now, no editing just get into the flow... here's my attempt

Lost
Lost between the pieces
of the puzzle you called us
I wondered when you would see
the picture of me
standing by the river
holding onto the letter
a letter you left in my locker
it said goodbye
but with a X and a O
and now I sit here
Lost
Lost between the pieces
of the puzzle you called us


OK, lets see what we can create...
Live the life you dream

"Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
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  • anOmisanOmis Posts: 223
    im spending my time
    sunken into my memories
    bulding my own glassy wall
    coz this world is just too small
    to understand my needs


    flowers get wilted
    under the black old son
    no dreams to build
    and no hope to come

    with the scream of an inscect
    and the soul of a climbin plant
    im just spendin my days
    waitin 4 the turn of time
    ~~dont mind yer make up, just make up yer mind~~

    ~~its better to be hated for who you are than be loved for who you are not~~

    F.ZAPPA
  • jboelhowjboelhow Posts: 170
    nice !!!
    Live the life you dream

    "Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
    So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
  • Undulating pulse rudder oar churn water wave roatation rowing boat sheer gleam stipple afternoon Cam go get and ice cream and watch this some more
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    hey now,
    puzzle piece
    peace play
    power plant
    see?
    this goes here
    you can tell by the lines
    and that
    oh yes..
    that

    right there... (baby)

    i am anxious to sigh

    sigh
    try

    swim
    mote

    teal
    eye

    heal
    fly
    ~all is full of love~
  • suedesuede Posts: 247
    this goes here,
    that goes there,
    i never was fully aware,
    of all the pain you didn't share.
    life goes quick,
    when you're not living it,
    but, now i'm living it...
    now you're living it...

    three words can make you sink,
    for all the times you'd think,
    that this wasn't fair,
    now my Heart goes there.

    so, this goes here,
    that goes there,
    now i'm fully aware,
    of all the time we never shared.
    so, this goes here,
    that goes there...
    come here...
    come over here...
    you, come over here...

    http://www.suedecrush.com
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    i like suede :D
    ~all is full of love~
  • jboelhowjboelhow Posts: 170
    Cool poems everyone...
    Live the life you dream

    "Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
    So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
  • The lines they scream for your attention
    Hear the needles weep intervention
    claw at the likeness of spiders on the wall
    claw at the pavement in hopes that you fall
    free your mind
    feel the ice
    take the punches
    roll the dice
    hope for wealth and pray for life
    sigh out regret and raise the knife
    slaughter the demons
    its only fair
    slaughter the cretin
    if you dare
    your mirror is your only savior
    your mirror copies your behavior
    so take a look and step one back
    see your life and what it lacks...




    um... that ok?
    They filled me full of drink
    And led me round the rooms
    Naked and cold and grinning
    Until everything went black
    And I came down spinning
    I awoke so drunk and full of rage
    That I could hardly speak
    A fag in a whale bone corset
    Draping his dick across my cheek
    And its into the shame
  • FunkeRFunkeR Posts: 105
    I want to rip your lungs out
    and watch you bleed
    I want to tear off your limbs
    and hear you scream
    just so you'd know
    what your love has done to me
    I want to bleed you dry
    and watch you squeel
    I want to knock you down
    so you won't hear
    all the horrible things I'd do to you
    all the morbid things I think of you
    and make you feel all the things I feel
    cause when you left me
    and my broken heart was on the floor
    so open for all to see
    you hurt me hard
    and I just want you to feel
    what I felt
    when you left me...
    I say what I want, when I want. It's freedom of fucking speech.

    Sperm, It's in you to give.




    I used to have something to say... now I'm just a caricature of who I was... it's sad, that the one piece of me I wanted for you, is nothing but a misrepresentation of everything I am.
  • jboelhowjboelhow Posts: 170
    intense FunkeR and AsPrivilegedAsAWhore... You guys would be good at an open mic night
    Live the life you dream

    "Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
    So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
  • Originally posted by FunkeR
    I want to rip your lungs out
    and watch you bleed
    I want to tear off your limbs
    and hear you scream
    just so you'd know
    what your love has done to me
    I want to bleed you dry
    and watch you squeel
    I want to knock you down
    so you won't hear
    all the horrible things I'd do to you
    all the morbid things I think of you
    and make you feel all the things I feel
    cause when you left me
    and my broken heart was on the floor
    so open for all to see
    you hurt me hard
    and I just want you to feel
    what I felt
    when you left me...

    and this one! I missed this.... well fukrn said
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    Originally posted by PastaNazi
    and this one! I missed this.... well fukrn said

    funker had a way... explicit expressiions of natural anger.. come back funker and stir it up
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • brain of cbrain of c Posts: 5,213
    he's a poet
    but he don't know it
    his feet show it
    they're longfellows
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    did a slam
    got slam-ed
    the audience
    boo-d the judges
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Originally posted by olderman
    funker had a way... explicit expressiions of natural anger.. come back funker and stir it up

    my sentiments, exactly

    :D
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