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hosh1314hosh1314 Posts: 63
edited December 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
not sure what to call these

Confusion in your voice
Not sure of what you speak
All because you know
You can't understand my disease
Recognize it, you may
But beware; before you do
The pain you claim it brings
Is not in me, but it is, in you

heres the second one

So long
Baffled
Lost in the ones at fault
Don't need to know my reasons
For they are mine
They are not yours
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    the second one I like the most..but in the first..I like the part about understanding the disease...
    and in your first poem..you kicked ass about you moved not me.
    I just like em,hosh.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

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  • MyAndrogynousMindMyAndrogynousMind Posts: 7
    I really like the second one. It is terse, yet elegant. It really moved me.

    Great job.
    "A new breed of people with their sudden wealth have stimulated pride and unrestraint in you, O Florence, made to weep so soon."

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