Thoughts on our work
L1quid
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My friend and I have been publishing our poetry and prose and would like some feedback, both on the writing itself, and on the design/layout of the site.
thanks!
My friend and I have been publishing our poetry and prose and would like some feedback, both on the writing itself, and on the design/layout of the site.
thanks!
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i like this one:
Break it down, all those little vices,
snapping up like a million mouths
strung on bleach white skeletons.
Their hate rises like fire and smoke
and I taste, breathe, and I choke
all my love and thought as a joke
rises up in my throat, mocking vomit
and there at my feet they sit,
stare up and grin, my pity-fit.