Home› Poetry, Prose, Music & Art

"Curtains closed" -by me

nicoolnicool Posts: 89
edited July 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Curtains Closed

i'm nothing in this world
just a useless spec to all eyes
surrounded in a world of lies

dying for your prescense
but you are no longer here
except for the faint
whisper in my ear

an emptiness within me
without u by my side
wish you never would've lied
because all your promises have died

the flower of your soul
is withered and brown
starting to take its toll
from underneath the ground

it released you from your pain
a loss without a gain
to the sky u aim
through the thunder and the rain

set yourself free
far away from me

i cant hold on
have to let go
since you've been gone..
time for the curtains to close...


thought i'd share with u guys... just what im feeling right now. just wrote it.
You sheltered me from nothing but the weather...
Post edited by Unknown User on

Comments

  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    everybody cares, everybody understands
    yes everybody cares about you
    yeah and whether or not you want them to
    it's a chemical embrace that kicks you in the head
    to a pure synthetic sympathy that infuriates you totally
    and a quiet lie that makes you wanna scream and shout
    so here i lay dreaming looking at the brilliant sun
    raining it's guiding light upon everyone
    for a moment's rest you can lean against the banister
    after running upstairs again and again from wherever they came to fix
    you in but always fear the city's finest follow right behind
    you got a pretty vision in your head
    a pencil full of poison lead
    and a sickened smoke illegal in every town
    so here i lay dreaming looking at the brilliant sun
    raining its guiding light upon everyone
    here i lay dreaming looking at the brilliant sun
    raining its guiding light upon everyone
    you say you mean well, you don't know what you mean
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • nicoolnicool Posts: 89
    Originally posted by Kwyjibo
    everybody cares, everybody understands
    yes everybody cares about you
    yeah and whether or not you want them to
    it's a chemical embrace that kicks you in the head
    to a pure synthetic sympathy that infuriates you totally
    and a quiet lie that makes you wanna scream and shout
    so here i lay dreaming looking at the brilliant sun
    raining it's guiding light upon everyone
    for a moment's rest you can lean against the banister
    after running upstairs again and again from wherever they came to fix
    you in but always fear the city's finest follow right behind
    you got a pretty vision in your head
    a pencil full of poison lead
    and a sickened smoke illegal in every town
    so here i lay dreaming looking at the brilliant sun
    raining its guiding light upon everyone
    here i lay dreaming looking at the brilliant sun
    raining its guiding light upon everyone
    you say you mean well, you don't know what you mean

    wow... did u write that yourself?!*jaw drops*
    You sheltered me from nothing but the weather...
  • nicoolnicool Posts: 89
    ?!?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!!??!?!?!?!?

    thats an awesome poem... did u write it???
    You sheltered me from nothing but the weather...
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    oh haha
    just saw that..


    I wish!

    its the very talented Elliott Smith
    RIP
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • ScavonePJScavonePJ Posts: 94
    Originally posted by nicool
    Curtains Closed

    i'm nothing in this world
    just a useless spec to all eyes
    surrounded in a world of lies

    dying for your prescense
    but you are no longer here
    except for the faint
    whisper in my ear

    an emptiness within me
    without u by my side
    wish you never would've lied
    because all your promises have died

    the flower of your soul
    is withered and brown
    starting to take its toll
    from underneath the ground

    it released you from your pain
    a loss without a gain
    to the sky u aim
    through the thunder and the rain

    set yourself free
    far away from me

    i cant hold on
    have to let go
    since you've been gone..
    time for the curtains to close...


    thought i'd share with u guys... just what im feeling right now. just wrote it.

    Damn, that deep, yet it scares me.
    "The true measure of a man is not where stands in times of comfort and convienence, But where he stands in moments of conflict and controversy."

    -Martin Luther King Jr.

    "Knowledge speaks, but wisdom listens"

    -Jimi Hendrix
  • nicoolnicool Posts: 89
    Originally posted by ScavonePJ
    Damn, that deep, yet it scares me.


    what is it that scares you?...sry i just threw all my thoughts out at once ad thats what came out
    You sheltered me from nothing but the weather...
  • rarghrargh-brownstarrarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    bump

    very powerful indeed.
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • nicoolnicool Posts: 89
    :(
    You sheltered me from nothing but the weather...
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Nicool... i gotta say. That you are VERY good at rhyming poetry. I, however, SUCK at it. I envy your ability to write rhyming poetry without it sounding too juvenile and "roses are red, violets are blue"-ish. I applaud your talent. :)


    but please cheer up?? mkay?
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • nicoolnicool Posts: 89
    Originally posted by of_the_girl
    Nicool... i gotta say. That you are VERY good at rhyming poetry. I, however, SUCK at it. I envy your ability to write rhyming poetry without it sounding too juvenile and "roses are red, violets are blue"-ish. I applaud your talent. :)


    but please cheer up?? mkay?

    wow... thx:)..... it means a lot to me :)
    You sheltered me from nothing but the weather...
  • THCTHC Posts: 525
    i like it...its very good and heart felt
    “Kept in a small bowl, the goldfish will remain small. With more space, the fish can grow double, triple, or quadruple its size.”
    -Big Fish
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Originally posted by THC
    i like it...its very good and heart felt

    I agree!

    I hope you have the strength to open the shades and let the light shine into your soul soon! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • nicoolnicool Posts: 89
    Originally posted by Being Enlightened
    I agree!

    I hope you have the strength to open the shades and let the light shine into your soul soon! :)

    thx both of you for liking my poem. Sometimes i just start feeling depressed out of nowhere.. and when i do i just put my thoughts down on paper or something... it's my version of therapy.
    You sheltered me from nothing but the weather...
Sign In or Register to comment.