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JoeJoe Posts: 25
edited April 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Don't be frightened
Time to sleep
All your musings
You will keep
All your problems
All your cares
When you wake
They'll still be there
All your loves
All your fears
Will wait as morning nears
And you'll wake and wonder why....

Don't be frightened
Time to rest
Thoughts from you
Sleep cannot wrest
And your family
Your friends
Will be there for you to tend
And victory
Defeat
Will wait for you to greet
And you'll wake and wonder why
You even fucking try
To make sense of life at all.
Through the darkness of futures past, the magician longs to see. One chants out between two worlds: "Fire Walk With Me." We lived among the people - I think you say convenience store? We lived above it. I mean it like it is, like it sounds. My name is Mike. His name is BOB.
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  • JoeJoe Posts: 25
    Come on. Someone say something. Even if you think it's shit. Especially if you think it's shit (As long as you tell me why, of course)
    Through the darkness of futures past, the magician longs to see. One chants out between two worlds: "Fire Walk With Me." We lived among the people - I think you say convenience store? We lived above it. I mean it like it is, like it sounds. My name is Mike. His name is BOB.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    I actually read this earlier today... and I loved it. I really did. But I didn't know what to call it... like, I couldn't think of a title.

    I wanted it to be _______ Lullabye... but I couldn't think of what the first part could be...

    I really really like it though. It's got this air of peace and also subtle bit of anger in it... especially at the end when "fucking" is used. But don't get me wrong, I admire that aspect of this piece.

    Just don't think this went unnoticed. I did put quite a bit of thought into it...:)

    Good job!!
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • robfest2robfest2 Posts: 594
    a title would be "this song sucks"
  • puremagicpuremagic Posts: 1,907
    Defeat Me
    SIN EATERS--We take the moral excrement we find in this equation and we bury it down deep inside of us so that the rest of our case can stay pure. That is the job. We are morally indefensible and absolutely necessary.
  • JoeJoe Posts: 25
    Originally posted by robfest2
    a title would be "this song sucks"

    Hey man, you gotta tell me why...
    Through the darkness of futures past, the magician longs to see. One chants out between two worlds: "Fire Walk With Me." We lived among the people - I think you say convenience store? We lived above it. I mean it like it is, like it sounds. My name is Mike. His name is BOB.
  • JoeJoe Posts: 25
    So I have another one and I couldn't be bothered starting another thread cos my poems are all fairly cack so I'll keep em here.

    A white tunnel of light
    Is that what waits for me?
    To be raised up to heaven
    Is that my destiny?

    Could I walk the rocky road
    That's paved with good intentions
    Might I spend eternity
    Trapped in hell's dimensions?

    Or will I just lie in a box
    Six feet neath soft earth
    No eternal damnation
    No reward, no rebirth

    Won't spend too long in musing
    About how this life will end
    My final destination
    I just cannot comprehend
    Through the darkness of futures past, the magician longs to see. One chants out between two worlds: "Fire Walk With Me." We lived among the people - I think you say convenience store? We lived above it. I mean it like it is, like it sounds. My name is Mike. His name is BOB.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Why would you say your writing is "cack"? I say it's lovely, and honest, and to the point. Nothing "cack" about it... although I'm not sure what "cack" means... I can only assume it's bad :p

    hee
    hee
    :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    nice poem :)
    I usually title mine after a verse if I think that particular verse sums it up

    I'd call yours: When you wake they'll be there
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
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